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| Yellow Eye; A Tale of Life, Love and Lust in 3 Acts | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Dec 17 2006, 07:38 AM (61 Views) | |
| Roan | Dec 17 2006, 07:38 AM Post #1 |
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I've begun work on an ambitious new project, which I'm titling "Yellow Eye". The concept of the project is to tell a central story through 3 points of view and how one moral decision that millions of people are faced with every year can effect so much more than the parties involved. I've only just finished the first act. I don't want to post it all until I've completed the entire story, but I have included the first Scene of Act 1. ------------------------ Yellow Eye Act 1: "Patriarch" Scene 1: "Genesis" Tools lie here and there One for every purpose Yet none of them could possibly prepare My falsely callused heart To create, to destroy I wield the power and means for both I'm a man of faith, good character So how is it this came to be? You came to me in your moment of need I took you in my arms Promised you it'd be alright Slyly asked if you'd stay the night Will this make things better? If you pour out your heart to me If I force my body onto you Will it make things right? Just this once, tell me you still love me Just this once, tell me you still need me -------------------------- So, what do you think? Would you be interested in reading the rest of the project? Any guesses as to what the story is? |
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| Roan | Dec 17 2006, 06:21 PM Post #2 |
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Here's the rest of the first act. Hopefully this will help you make a little sense out of what I'm going for here. ------- Act 1: "Patriarch" Scene 2: "Evacuation" Split "V" on the table I've seen it so many times before But this time is different, foreign, strange My brain is inline, but my heart feels incapable Sleeping sound in anaesthesia If it weren't for your slowly rising chest I'd swear you were dead I'd almost rather be I'll inject the ingredients to kill Where once I had hoped to create Can you ever forgive me? This silence will forever resonate The syringe has been drained The scalpal has made its incisions There in the cervix its framed The weight of our decision With eyes closed, I'll dispose of it With eyes closed, I'll end us ------------------------- Act 1: "Patriarch" Scene 3: "Causatum" Dear Lord, can you ever forgive a man like me? I create to destroy others endeavors Never once have I stopped to consider That you are the God I aspire to be You create for me to destroy I take them all on willingly Break down their undeveloped minds In hopes of making others happy Their money talks Drowns out the unborn screams This time my heart Seems to tune them in This time the scalpal Has walked down my own flesh street Dear Lord, how could you ever give life to a man like me? ------------------------- That's it for Act 1. Lemme' know what you think. |
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| Reno's Sub | Dec 17 2006, 09:20 PM Post #3 |
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hmm i like.I t seems to be a story about a gultiy doctor to me lol. |
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| Roan | Jan 7 2007, 11:11 PM Post #4 |
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Close. It does involve a doctor, and he is feeling guilt for what he does. But what kind of doctor is he? What does he do to others? He performs abortions. This time, he performs an abortion on his own ex-wife because as I described in Scene 1, they had a little fling and she ended up pregnant. |
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