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Ramsey Cortez; We never die, that's why my motto still alive, like Aaliyah's spirit I told you one and a million times
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Name: Ramsey Cortez
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Grade: Senior
School: George Hunter High School
Hobbies and Interests: Piano; electronica music, RnB, and rap; fashion; makeup and hairdressing; gossip; partying and socialization; church and bible study; basketball

Appearance: Ramsey is 5’11” and weighs 175 lb. He is tone and muscular, with broad shoulders and defined pectorals. Due to his heritage his skin tone is olive, slightly darker than siblings due to tanning. He has the occasional outbreak of clusters of acne over his chin, every few months. His face is slightly long, his cheekbones prominent, and he has a long and sharp chin. He has a normal sized nose, slightly button shape with a narrow bridge. His lips are a bit thick, and slightly dark relative to his complexion. His hair is dark and naturally slightly curly, he wears it with some top volume, and grown to messily cover his ears and temples. He speaks with a neutral accent, his voice is slightly tough but slightly high in octave.

He wears simple clothes, tees and jeans, but he has a good sense of fit and silhouette. He sometimes wears tight shirts to tease and show off his upper body. Sometimes he wears womens-cut shirts, for this reason, along with simple appreciation of women’s fashion. He’s known for typically going shirtless when he can get away with it. He doesn’t often wear accessories due to cost, but he does have an ear pierced with a simple faux gold stud, and likes to wear snapbacks occasionally.

On the day of the abduction he was wearing a loose and slightly oversized white tee with black thin stripes horizontal over the chest. This on top of a thin sleeveless white undershirt; along with fitted black denim jeans, and a black snapback with the Wu Tang logo on it in yellow.

Biography: Ramsey is the second child born to the Cortez family, behind his one year and some months older sister Angie, ahead of younger sisters Maya (15), Aimee (14), and Flora (12). The family is Chattanooga native, and has never moved from their first home. From a young age Ramsey’s conservative parents, Karen and Phillip, raised him with a traditional outlook on life. Karen was a housewife, Phillip worked as a power plant technician, and from an early age gender role stereotypes were enforced. Family and church were most important of all, and from a young age Ramsey was taught to help his father and grandfather around the house. This was important for the family, as they were low income and thus a DIY outlook was important. Ramsey was something of a quiet child, disciplined and dutiful to his teachers in preschool and on. Ramsey’s tendencies to being respectful meant he was a darling in church, and often held up to his more rambunctious elder sister as an example.

In Ramsey's first years of formal education his parents bought Angie a piano and since he was old enough he was also allowed to join the lessons. His parents didn’t have the money to pay for both children’s lessons, but their kindly teacher Mr. Dwyer would allow him to sit in and receive lessons for free from time to time. Ramsey valued these rare opportunities, as he thought being a pianist was cool and he dreamed of being part of an ensemble someday. He learned at the same clip as his sister due to his stubborn determination and attentiveness, and the two bonded over their lessons. They are the only two piano players in the family, splitting time on the keyboard, Ramsey has tried to teach the younger girls in the family but they are typically uninterested.

Angie’s issues in elementary school warped Ramsey’s experience somewhat. She picked fights with teachers and had bad grades. He was sometimes avoided by or bullied by peers who associated him with his elder sister's more violent and negative behaviors. He helped her in the limited ways he knew how, especially when her ADHD diagnosis was made, he prayed for her. He found that he prefered time in Sunday School to his actual elementary school. He had mixed gender friend groups and enjoyed playing soccer and basketball with them after hours, being a sporty sort.

By the third grade Ramsey had a few close friends in elementary school, usually a quiet sort of crowd, separate from his siblings as they hung out together in a group with younger students, though he still met them in school regularly. His friends at the time listened to rap and crunk, and were wannabe breakdancers. Ramsey wasn’t particularly interested in dancing but he enjoyed the mid-2000s fashion and found heroes in rappers like The Game, T.I., Young Jeezy, and so on, and they remain nostalgic listens for him to this day. He had a year long phase of practicing rap, though his sister and parent’s judgements weaned him off those particular ambitions. By means of easy crossover he also got into more smooth genres of RnB, like quiet storm and new jack swing, which were to his parent’s tastes. He and his father especially, as they’d play those sorts of tunes while working around the house.

Ramsey's elementary school days were easy, spent between school, hanging out with his friends, church, and his family. He also continued to regularly keep up with his piano practice, and he appeared in a few of Angie’s piano recital videos. He was close with all of the siblings, splitting family duties with Angie, babysitting, household chores, and so on, with his ‘second man of the house’ status meaning he had plenty of work-intensive things to do like patching up the roof, and so on. Between this and his childhood sports he would hit his puberty years athletic and strong.

By his second year of middle school Ramsey enjoyed a fair amount of popularity like his sister did, with attention from girls in particular, he was a fairly common crush target due to his budding handsome appearance and soft-spoken reliable and loyal nature. He was invited to the occasional party. He dated a girl or two, and had his first kiss, though he was relatively unphased by hitting these milestones in his life. He found it somewhat easier to be friends with girls, starting at this time in his life. Their interests merely aligned with his more, he liked being more casually intimate and open with his feelings. He developed a penchant for gossip, and liked ‘bitching out’ with his girls between classes.

At home Ramsey's sisters also hitting puberty all one after the other in a short period of time gave him plenty of further awkward teen girlfriends to be had, and since all of the Cortez children went to the same school one after the other their conversations tended to also be gossip heavy as they shared the same peers and teachers. Ramsey learned about makeup and hair, first through passive osmosis, then through hands on study as he was sometimes recruited to be a helping hand. His appreciation for women’s fashion grew, though he was frustrated by a lack of avenue of expression, as he was hesitant to open up about the interest to his female friends outside of the house.

In his first year in George Hunter High, Ramsey elected to tryout for the junior varsity basketball team, as his interest in sports was somewhat diminished but he had social interest in staying with a team. He put up a solid performance and was put on the team. He experienced a renaissance in interest due to making new, good friends and having an inspiring coach, he worked hard to improve himself for the team, driven less by personal competition and more by the need to not let his friends down. The price of being on the team was mostly covered by the school, though his gear is poor quality and he skips on some training due to home duties, further devaluing him as a player. He eventually became varsity but he rotates on and off the bench, he is aware that he is not starter material but keeps a strict practice regimen despite the lack of scholarship opportunities. His mother has criticized him for what she perceives as a waste of time, but his father approves of his athleticism and has his back on this hobby.

Ramsey also shied away from his former popularity and party-goer status in high school, preferring quieter friends and sometimes time to himself to listen to music. Around the house he became somewhat involved in his sister Angie’s budding interests in music production and recording by collaborating with her with his own pianist skills. He couldn’t devote much time to it between his school and home commitments, but free time was often spent with his sisters. He developed a similar interest in electronica genres that she had through exposure, especially since rap and EDM had a brief period of mainstream crossover around this time in his life. It was rap that would ultimately be more important, however, as Ramsey’s tastes in high school expanded to include tastes in the explosion of Soundcloud rap and the new names that came with that scene. They also inspired his fashion, and though Ramsey obviously cannot afford them he does have an interest in following designer names and up-to-date runway fashion just for the aesthetics.

Around his Sophomore year Philip began training him with the expectation that he’d go to trade school as Ramsey’s grades were solid but they doubted they could afford college. Since at least two of Ramsey’s younger sisters- Aimee and Flora- showed more potential as academics Ramsey agreed that for the good of the family it would be best that he got a trade job to help get the sisters through college, he began shadowing his father at his own job as an power plant operations technician.

His sisters were somewhat annoyed on his behalf, by this point Ramsey’s talent and passion for makeup and fashion had made themselves pretty apparent, his thrifty but cutting-edge taste was often referred to by his younger sisters when trying to update their wardrobes. They insisted he be more rebellious and proactive, but he remained dutiful to what he felt was best for his family, though over time the pressure would begin to mount. Ramsey became very zealous about his church duties around this time, using spiritual comfort to alleviate the difficult turn in his life, but things would only further devolve as time passed.

The summer between his Sophomore and Junior years Ramsey had been invited to a study group in a shared class with Emily Sharp. He found himself drawn to her life story, at once respecting and pitying her, and somewhere along the line of their budding friendship he mistook his emotions for a crush and asked her out. They formed a strong romance, deep and intimate, and the two trusted one another dearly. But Ramsey was not physically attracted to Emily, he loved her only as a friend and kindred soul, and attempts at physical intimacy fizzled out and stalled, putting strain on the relationship.

Ramsey had growing reason to suspect his sexuality, between awkward encounters in the locker rooms after practice and his infatuation with certain male models. He was on some level willing to accept the mounting evidence that he was homosexual, it didn’t initially bother him. Where the problems for him came was in how his newfound identity massively complexified his relationships. Emily, his parents, and perhaps most importantly his church. Between Junior and Senior year Ramsey enlisted Angie’s help in probing his parents, their homophobic views became fairly clear, and Ramsey resolved that he had to go about his coming out smarter, staying in the closet for a few years to save money and move out, but this didn’t sit well with his family-oriented mentality.

Furthermore, Ramsey broke up with Emily and confessed his sexuality. The two remain friends, but perhaps not healthy ones, as each’s baggage became toxic to the other. Ramsey couldn’t handle Emily’s problems on top of his own, much as he tried, and the inverse was true, the more each of them tried the more they hurt the other. Neither has yet to quite let go.

Ramsey, finally, has been questioning his spirituality, which is a massive existential shock that has him at times feeling dead inside. He continues to fervently attend church and duties, he even begun assisting in Sunday School, but he feels like a fraud and disconnected from his former refuge and sanctuary. The pileup of all the changes he underwent in the last year of his life have forced Ramsey to cope however he knows. Friends have noted Ramsey has become more toxic, his gossip mongering has become mean spirited. He has started going to parties again regularly, perhaps seeking companions even as he has to keep his mouth shut, deep in the closet as he is. He adheres strictly to his father’s plan for his moving on to trade school, but stresses over how he will balance all his responsibilities while keeping up appearances at home.

Advantages: Ramsey is athletically balanced, with training from both school sports and from home duties giving him strong body and endurance. Ramsey is used to being quiet and putting off the appearance of being loyal and dutiful, which may provide him an edge in projecting appearances on island.
Disadvantages: Ramsey lacks actual mental ambition and is used to heavily doubting himself without external direction, meaning he will likely be aimless in developing a plan of survival. Ramsey is fundamentally spiritual: charitable and altruistic with a dislike of directly starting fights, so his willingness to take survival into his own hands may falter.
Edited by Cicada Days, Apr 30 2018, 08:26 AM.
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Hey Cica, I've got Ramsey. He's mostly fine, but DENIED pending some wording adjustments and clarifications I want you to make. You've heard the spiel, let's get into it.

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Hobbies and Interests: Piano; electronica music, RnB, and rap; fashion; makeup and hairdressing; gossip; partying and socialization; church and bible study; basketball.


This is minor, but you don't need the period on the end here.

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Ramsey is 5’11” and weighs 175 lb, so his figure is lithe and he has disproportionate, stick-like arms.


175 pounds at 5'11" is nearly overweight, nobody with that BMI would be lithe with stick-like arms, they'd either be muscular or have a little chub. Either adjust his weight to put him closer to an underweight/nearly underweight BMI or change your description of his body type.

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He speaks with a neutral accent, his voice is slightly tough but slightly high in octave.


I think you could move this sentence up to be the last sentence of your first paragraph in the appearance section, rather than having it be awkwardly all on its own.

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Ramsey is the second child born to the Cortez family, behind his one year and some months older sister Angie, ahead of younger sisters Maya (15), Aimee (14), and Flora (12).


I find no mention of Ramsey's family moving anywhere in the profile, so you should specify that he was born in Chattanooga.

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This was important for the family, as they were low income and thus a DIY outlook was important.


You mention they were low income, but what were the actual jobs his parents have?

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In his first years of formal education his parents bought Angie a piano and since he was old enough he was also allowed to play the lessons.


Not sure what you were trying to say here but... "play the lessons" is a pretty awkward turn of phrase. Adjust it, please.

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Angie’s issues in elementary school warped


This comes out of nowhere with the way it's presented now. While you explain it more in the paragraph, you should probably restructure it so the details of Angie's issues come first, then their effects on Ramsey.

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do like patching up the roof, so on.


Should probably be an "and" in between roof and so on.

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gossip heavy since they had the same peers and teachers and all.


This is a fairly informal way to say this, change it to something like "...gossip heavy, due to the siblings sharing the same peers and teachers."

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He also shied away from his former popularity and party-goer status in high school, preferring quieter friends and sometimes time to himself to listen to music.


You need to restate his name in the first sentence of each paragraph, for the sake of complete clarity, change that first he to Ramsey.

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This didn’t sit well with his family-oriented mentality.


This sentence should be a continuation of the previous one, since it's a fragment as-is.

...and that's it. Post back here when you have those edits made and I'll give him another look.
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Edits made, thanks Turtle! No Changelog done this time since none of the edits involved too much being cut or added.
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