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The V2 Read-o-thon; Olden days
Topic Started: Aug 24 2017, 06:45 PM (8,964 Views)
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Some say he tortures and murders people for fun and doing so to attractive females arouses him (he refused to confirm or deny the second, and when asked about the first he said "I do it sometimes, it's kind of cool I guess, now are you going to get out of my face or is something bad going to have to happen to you?" to the kid who worked up the courage to ask.).

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I wouldn't really say Walter is a good character, in all honesty. Despite the profile being sorta funny in how much it tries to set up Walter as like, this edgy evil figure, this doesn’t really apply in the game itself and in all honesty he’s just sorta boring for the most part. He’s psychotic, but not in a way that’s really interesting, as instead of letting this show through his thought processes or emotional core we’re just constantly told by the narrative that he’s psychotic over and over again, and his actions (going into great detail on how he cuts a dudes dick off, raping Mariavel) are pretty clearly aiming for shock value and setting him up to be like, the big villain of V2 - but robbing him of a proper emotional core that a villain really needs to be seen as interesting and more than a one note psycho who does things just because they’re seen as bad things to do by the writer.

Walter also suffers mechanically as well, and on a pure writing levels there’s a couple things he does that just irk me as a reader. During fight scenes with other handlers - such as with Blake and Mariavel - there’s this thing Walter does where he goes into hypotheticals on what happens depending on which actions succeed or not, which reeks of GMing and as a reader takes me right out of what’s happening in front of me. In addition, his narrative is loaded with contradictions, stating one thing and then shortly after saying something that contradicts this (an example being “Most could not tell from a simple glance, but the boy was a total psychopath. Almost everyone knew of that fact, and his random outbursts of violence,” stating a fact and then contradicting it the very next sentence), which as a reader confuses me and makes it harder to understand what the narrative is trying to say, which given the issues with the narriative already doesn’t make it any more interesting or pleasent to read.

I will say that Slayer/TBH has written good characters before, but to be honest Walter is far from one of them, and to be honest isn’t someone I’d really recommend at all.

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I got forgotten :(
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I can't really say that there was a lot to Jaime as a character. Her role in the one thread she had was essentially “appear, talk to Mariavel, attack her and then get killed by her” and even within this there’s not a lot dedicated to her - the majority of the thread takes Mariavel’s perspective and the majority of what we do get dedicated to Jaime is this blank prose which - although it does give us viewpoints into Jaime’s thoughts - doesn’t really give us any ideas on how she is emotionally until the very end (which is essentially generic ‘oh no, I’ll never achieve this now that I’m dead) and doesn’t really provide any interest for the reader to grab onto. It’s pretty clear that Jaime only existed so that her death could prop up Anna’s and Mariavel’s stories, and although that might make Mariavel or Anna better, it doesn’t really make Jaime by herself an engrossing read, and personally it doesn’t make me care about her all that much.

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I’m… a little confused right now.

So the writing behind Laura is pretty good, and we get a pretty clear sense of her voice right out from the gate and we can pretty easily tell what her character is like - as this sorta angry, sorta cynical girl trying to fight against the voice in her head that she hates. We even get the a progressive arc in the space of four posts, trying to fight against this voice and her lashings out becoming external, to the point where she decides she’s going to kill herself just to get it to shut up. It’s pretty good, and the fact that this arc was done within the space of four posts is pretty commendable, and something that if it weren’t for her problems would make me look at her more as a way to perform an arc in a short amount of time.

The problem is that there’s a lot of things aimed at the reader which are just… seriously confusing and this severely prevents the message that Shula is trying to send from being totally coherent. This is mostly in regards to the voice in Laura’s head - we as readers don’t know where the voice come from and what it tries to represent, and the fact that we never get an answer as to what it was within her posts or within the profile just leaves me as a reader confused as to what it means and what the point Shula’s trying to convey is. In addition, formatting wise, at points I’m not sure whether something is the voice in Laura’s or Shula using italics for other things, and all that does is just make me unsure about like, whether the voice made her kill herself by doing a songpost.

All in all I can see what’s there and I can appreciate what Shula was trying to achieve with Laura, but there’s some flaws in her story in regards to what the voice is and whether it’s actually there or not which severely hinder it. I would recommend her as a somewhat good V2er, but I will warn anyone else reading her that they’re probably gonna be seriously confused coming out of it.

Another please, dear Rugga.
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Here’s a doc I made containing my live thoughts as I went through Stephanie. Feel free to see my total confusion first hand.

So… Stephanie isn’t really a good character. At all. Although it looks from her initial one-shot that she’s going to be some decent (if… one note, there wasn’t really a lot of depth as to how she was being portrayed) manipulator type, subsequent threads essentially throw that and any sense of consistency out the window as she keeps suddenly changing between “person who wants to manipulate the competition so she can win,” “insane psycho who randomly rushes at and attacks people,” and “deeply remorseful person who just wants to die” with no real reason as to when and why these switches happen, sometimes changing and then declaring that those changes are a lie as a way of manipulating herself multiple times within the same post. I could buy and even possibly like this idea if there was an explanation as to why Stephanie keeps doing this, but the reader never really does get an answer for why Stephanie acts this way, and her death scene - particularly the reasons as to why she suddenly kills herself - just ended up leaving me totally confused as to why Stephanie did that, and as to why overall Stephanie seemingly had no consistency to her character.

It looks like I’m out of the read-a-thon with this one, although if anyone thinks that they’re not going to read their kid then they can give them to me. I’m fine with adding more onto my plate.
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"Problems began to occur when Matt was looking for more of a physical aspect in the relationship. Deliah was terrified of losing any affection she felt she worked so hard for, and so she gave her virginity to her sweet boyfriend.

It's currently been three months, and Deliah spends a lot of her time crying now. She still hasn't told Matt that she's carrying his child."
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"Age: 14" OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH BOY


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My Recappy Deliah Review. Trigger Warning - Miscarriage


So… that’s it. I’m out of the read-a-thon now. Of course I’m absolutely free to take anyone else's characters if you don’t want to take them anymore but for now, I’m free! Final rankings for the V2 characters I read are:

Laura Diesen (C Tier - Characters I like, but have major flaws marring their story) > Deliah Dollop (D+ Tier - Characters who could have been good, but who I feel squandered or didn’t live up to their potential) > Jaime Dibenidetti (D- Tier - The Apathy Zone) > Walter Smith (E Tier - Characters I Dislike) > Stephanie Crew (E Tier)

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I'll take Sansa's kid.
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