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Caleb Diamond
Topic Started: Apr 9 2016, 07:50 PM (205 Views)
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Hey, Vicks! Caleb's a good start, but DENIED pending some elaboration and edits.


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They were both very naturally intelligent and had voracious appetites for knowledge.


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The quality of his school work in the latter half of freshman year dipped.


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Even though he no longer spend hours awake, but he still goes back to video games when he’s bored


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All of the siblings skateboard,



Can we just get a bit more elaboration on the incident with his uncle? Why were the family kosher with letting a recovering drug addict stay with them? Did it not make anyone uneasy? Was this the first time that Jerry had gone around robbing people? It's a bit of a dramatic turn in an otherwise low-key profile, so I wouldn't mind just a little more elaboration on it.

What kind of funny things does Caleb try to post on 4chan and reddit? Witty comments? Amusing gifs? I'm just curious about his sense of humour.

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aspires to do pharmaceutical research.


Also, why pharmaceuticals in particular, rather than just flat out chemistry?

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and being the first to declare “Not my problem” but if pushed, he will help a friend in need.


Could you just rephrase this to remove the quote for me?

Finally, how's Caleb's relationship with James these days?


That's it for now, so let me know when you've made the edits and I'll give Caleb another look. Thanks!
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This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested by the staff.
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