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MW's Tiny Critiques: Strength/Weakness; Finally a critique thread I won't take years to plow through!
Topic Started: Aug 18 2014, 02:19 AM (6,917 Views)
MurderWeasel
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Heya, folks!

I've been inspired by NAFT's three-sentence experimental critique thread, which seems to have finally overcome a lot of the typical problems inherent to critique threads in general (and that specifically have plagued me over the past few I've started). As such, with his blessing, I'm going to launch my own cheap, low-grade knockoff.

Basically, ask me to look at one of your characters, and I'll give my opinion on their greatest strength and their greatest weakness off the top of my head. If I'm really, really torn I might do two for one category or the other, but I'm gonna try to keep that rare. I may also change my mind at some point later. This is a very off the cuff thing. It's going to be at most a mid-sized paragraph for each, probably usually only a few sentences.

I'll take any character from V4, V5, or Mini. Part of this is that I'm only going to be looking at characters I've already read so I can make snap calls and not get mired in going over every little detail again and again. I don't care if your kid is alive or dead, but please note that I'm a week and a half behind on TV2 kids and thus any TV2 kid who has had posts in the last twelve days will be held at the back of the queue/left un-critiqued until I am caught up. Since I'm gonna try to clear the queue daily or every other day, but may take up to a week to fully catch up, it's probably strategically best to hold off on those kids if you have anyone else you want an opinion on.

I ask that requests be held to one character per handler at a time; as soon as I post your write-up you can ask for another, though.

Also, NAFT's condition for lending his blessing was that he get the first critique, which I'm using as a demo of what to expect:





Matthew Weiss

Strength: Matt is funny. His entire deal is being a satiric take on trends that have swept the site at various points, and when these things can mesh with his character and story, he can be very entertaining. He also serves as a good and knowing example of why those trends are bad ideas.

Weakness: The big thing is, there are a lot of times when Matt's silly stuff doesn't quite mesh with his story and instead takes precedence. He's so much about making a point that it can be distracting or detract from otherwise interesting scenes. Also, doing something annoying ironically runs the very real risk of it remaining annoying, and while Matt usually stays on the right side of that line, it's not 100%.





That out of the way, have at!

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Hm, quite interesting. I would like you to look at Joachim Lovelace until Schwarze Rosen.
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Ian Williams, if you'd be so kind?
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