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Megan Collins
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Name: Megan Collins
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: Senior
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies And Interests: Megan loves to play soccer, and she plays it both in her school and in leagues outside of school. She also loves to watch rugby and football, and is a die hard Seahawks fan (she loves Marshawn Lynch), although she’ll really watch and enjoy pretty much any sport. Aside from soccer, she likes to listen to music, go running, hang out with friends, drink, and hook up with guys.

Appearance: Megan’s 5’8”, 133 pounds, and 100% Irish. She has spiky, cropped short red hair, and bright wide green eyes. She has a face that is able to appear both cute and seductive at the same time, with a cute button nose and sultry red lips. She has long legs, and an athletic build. Her extra weight goes to the right places, and she enjoys showing off her ‘assets’ with low cut cleavage shirts and tight spandex or skirts. She’s not a model in terms of looks, but she’s enough to get a double take from almost any guy, and when she really wants to turn her sex appeal on she can. On the day she was abducted, she was wearing yoga pants and a V neck white T shirt.

Biography: Megan was born in Seattle in a home that, it appeared to her, her parents had simply tried to fit all of Ireland in. Instead of football, baseball, and basketball, soccer and rugby were the sports of choice; St. Patrick’s Day, Christmas, and Easter were the biggest holidays for the Irish Catholic family, in that order. Megan grew up with two older brothers and two younger brothers, neither the older nor the younger more than two years apart from Megan. In so far as their political views went, all Megan remembered was them condemning the current president, governor, or mayor as a “stupid prick” or “fucking dumbass”. It was the Collins’s view that if you went through life just obeying every rule, you were either a coward or a fool. And the Collins definitely didn’t raise either.

Megan, growing up, took tomboy to a whole different level. She hit her growth spurt early, being tall even for a girl, and she had an aggressiveness that always made her father smile when he’d see her playing with her brothers. Even her older brothers were afraid to play her in rugby. When they got the ball, she’d jump on their back and no matter how hard they ran or how much they tried to get her off of them, she wouldn’t relax until she had gotten them down. At the end of the day, if there wasn’t dirt stains all over her pants, sweat on her shirt and face, and a few bruises and scrapes on her arms and legs, Megan wasn’t happy.

Megan started playing soccer when she was in 2nd grade, and quickly took to it. She was a natural athlete, and her size and aggressive style of play allowed her to overpower the other girls and become a star at that sport. She loved playing it, and more than that, she loved the sense of being on a team. She was a people person, and she loved talking to people and socializing with them. She loved the sense of companionship.

But as she got older, her personality began to develop more and more. She was an abrasive girl, not because she was a bully or even really mean, but because when she had an opinion about something, she’d let people know. She wasn’t the type to agree with someone just to shut them up, and if she believed strongly in something, she’d make sure people knew it. She also cursed like a sailor that just stubbed his toe for the third time that day, which was a little hard for some people to get along with.

She matured early, and with her physical maturity came an interest in boys. She had feelings for them for an early age, and even early on she knew she wasn’t like other girls. She didn’t feel like she needed a boyfriend; she just wanted the guys, not necessarily a boyfriend. Does she want to have a boyfriend? Yes, of course she does, but she’s not going to settle for the first guy that comes along. She wants a guy that likes her, that she likes, that understands her. Someone that loves her for every part of her, and someone that she can love back. She hasn’t found anyone like that yet.

But, just because she didn’t want the guys that talked to her as boyfriends didn’t mean she couldn’t have “a little fun”. As a younger girl, she was the one who always suggested ‘Spin The Bottle’ or ‘Seven Minutes In Heaven’. As a teenager, she was one of the first in her grade to lose her virginity. Whenever she’s thinking about a guy, she keeps in mind her three cardinal rules- 1. He has to be cute, 2. He has to be funny, and 3. He has to be a good guy. If a guy meets her standards, and she wants him, she sees no reason not to go for what she wants.

And if you say one thing about Megan, you can say she’s a partier. She was just as competitive with her brothers when it came to partying as she was with rugby when they were younger, and by 15, she was able to drink them all under the table. Quite an impressive feat, considering her oldest brother was 6’4, 255, and had been drinking since he was 12. She drank beer, she drank whiskey, she drank wine, she drank vodka... she’d drink motor oil if it’d get her drunk. Her parents didn't care, not after she had turned 15; in their minds, she was a woman now, and an Irish woman should be able to drink and party as she wants to, as long as she was willing to deal with the consequences. That's the one thing they warned her about- any mistakes she made drunk, she'd have to deal with. But she was good at avoiding making trouble when she was drunk, and was able to enjoy herself. Some of the best moments of her life were hanging out with her friends, getting smashed in their basements, making jokes and making out.

Other than her friends, she spent a lot of time with her family. Her family was always close, getting together all the time on vacations, playing a few annual extended family rugby games at least a few times a year. In addition, a tradition that she has with her parents and brothers is a hiking trip once every year during the summer. She loves the trip, and although she’ll never say it, she loves having her brothers around her on the trip. She puts on a tough act all the time, and she is tough, but she always enjoys that around her brothers she can show a more vulnerable side to herself.

Megan isn’t a straight A student, but she gets Bs and she’s happy with it. She’s not school smart, and she hates studying… if she looks at a textbook for too long, she’ll get a headache. But she’s not stupid, not by any means. She’s smart when it comes to everything out of school. She knows how to get out of bad situations, and she knows how to defuse them when they get out of control. She knows how to make sure her sex is safe, and she knows how to avoid a bad guy. Just to make sure, as she goes to college parties, parties in other parts of the town, and basically does put herself in situations where things could get out of hand, she attended rape prevention classes with her mother, and carries a rape whistle with her at all times.

The rape prevention classes were simple tactics and techniques, and a lot of it was common sense, but it left her feeling more reassured. She knew where to hit a guy to stop him- other than the obvious location of testicles- and she knew the things to say to get people to notice what was happening. Luckily, she’s never have to put any of it into practice. It almost happened once, with a guy who was getting a little touchy feely and couldn’t take a hint, but Megan had gotten out of that one before things had escalated.

Megan is a girl, ultimately, who just wants to enjoy life. Whether it’s playing on the soccer team, listening to some music, hanging out with a guy, or just partying it up with her friends, she just wants to enjoy life. There are people who dislike her, and there are plenty of girls who talk down about her. She doesn't care though, and as long as her family and close friends know the person she is on the inside, she can let the other girls say whatever they want.

Advantages: Megan is a strong, athletic girl, and she’s good looking. She knows a lot of people in the school, and she’s strong willed and used to being on her own. She’s not incredibly smart school-wise, but she’s got a large amount of street smarts and practical knowledge. Because of her hiking trips and her father, she has a basic knowledge of surviving in the wilderness.
Disadvantages: She’s got an abrasive attitude, and she doesn’t like working with other people if they think she’s weak or vulnerable, or treat her as an inferior. Also, she’s not the best planner; often times, she lets instincts and feelings take over when it would be a far better idea to sit back and actually think over the situation.
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J.J. Sturn- "I'm not a bad person. I'm not a bad person."
Mike Jeffries- "Don't worry, guys. Everything's going to be just fine."
Omar Burton- "I must say, I'm beginning to realize that I'm the only smart person in the room."
Kaitlin Anderheim- "I've never even talked to a guy before..."

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Hey Game Maker. Megan is denied pending some changes, kay?

ame: Megan Collins
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: Senior
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies And Interests: Megan loves to play soccer, and she plays it both in her school and in leagues outside of school. She also loves to watch rugby and football, and is a die hard Seahawks fan (she loves Marshawn Lynch), although she’ll really watch and enjoy pretty much any sport. Aside from soccer, she likes to listen to music, go running, hang out with friends, drink, and hook up with guys.

First problem. Hobbies and interests should be a list, not sentences. It should be Soccer, watching rugby and football, listing to music, running, hanging out with friends, drinking, hooking up

Appearance: Megan’s 5’8”, 133 pounds, and 100% Irish. She has spiky, cropped short red hair, and bright wide green eyes. She has a face that is able to appear both cute and seductive at the same time, with a cute button nose and sultry red lips. How is her face both cute and seductive? These seem like opposing descriptions. Also, does she wear lipstick? No one has naturally red lips. She has long legs, and an athletic build. Her extra weight goes to the right places, and she enjoys showing off her ‘assets’ with low cut cleavage shirts and tight spandex or skirts. Extra weight? With those stats Megan is pretty thin. She is at the lower end of a healthy BMI She’s not a model in terms of looks, but she’s enough to get a double take from almost any guy, and when she really wants to turn her sex appeal on she can. On the day she was abducted, she was wearing yoga pants and a V neck white T shirt.

Biography: Megan was born in Seattle in a home that, it appeared to her, her parents had simply tried to fit all of Ireland in. The sentence is awkward with that interruption in it. I'd rather you show don't tell. Don't tell me it looked like they tried to put a lot of Ireland into the house. Describe it to me. Instead of football, baseball, and basketball, soccer and rugby were the sports of choice; St. Patrick’s Day, Christmas, and Easter were the biggest holidays for the Irish Catholic family, in that order. Megan grew up with two older brothers and two younger brothers, neither the older nor the younger more than two years apart from Megan. In so far as their political views went, all Megan remembered was them condemning the current president, governor, or mayor as a “stupid prick” or “fucking dumbass”. It was the Collins’s view that if you went through life just obeying every rule, you were either a coward or a fool. And the Collins definitely didn’t raise either. Her brothers have no names and no real ages. The quotations are too informal and unnecessary. Just tell me they don't like the current government figures.

Megan, growing up, took tomboy to a whole different level. Too informal. She hit her growth spurt early, being tall even for a girl, and she had an aggressiveness that always made her father smile when he’d see her playing with her brothers. Even her older brothers were afraid to play her in rugby. When they got the ball, she’d jump on their back and no matter how hard they ran or how much they tried to get her off of them, she wouldn’t relax until she had gotten them down. At the end of the day, if there wasn’t dirt stains all over her pants, sweat on her shirt and face, and a few bruises and scrapes on her arms and legs, Megan wasn’t happy.

Megan started playing soccer when she was in 2nd grade, and quickly took to it. She was a natural athlete, and her size and aggressive style of play allowed her to overpower the other girls and become a star at that sport. She loved playing it, and more than that, she loved the sense of being on a team. Awkward. Sense of being on a team? How about "She loved the camaraderie." She was a people person, and she loved talking to people and socializing with them. She loved the sense of companionship. Repetitive.

But as she got older, her personality began to develop more and more No need for the comma in that sentence. She was an abrasive girl, not because she was a bully or even really mean, but because when she had an opinion about something, she’d let people know. She wasn’t the type to agree with someone just to shut them up, and if she believed strongly in something, she’d make sure people knew it. She also cursed like a sailor that just stubbed his toe for the third time that day, which was a little hard for some people to get along with. Tone issues here. There must be more concise ways to phrase a lot of these traits and the end with being like a cursing sailor is too casual for the profile. Also you say she "cursed," I'm assuming she still does.

She matured early, and with her physical maturity came an interest in boys. She had feelings for them forfrom an early age, and even early on she knew she wasn’t like other girls. She didn’t feel like she needed a boyfriend; she just wanted the guys, not necessarily a boyfriend. Does she want to have a boyfriend? Yes, of course she does, but she’s not going to settle for the first guy that comes along. She wants a guy that likes her, that she likes, that understands her. Someone that loves her for every part of her, and someone that she can love back. She hasn’t found anyone like that yet.

But, just because she didn’t want the guys that talked to her as boyfriends didn’t mean she couldn’t have “a little fun”. As a younger girl, she was the one who always suggested ‘Spin The Bottle’ or ‘Seven Minutes In Heaven’. As a teenager, she was one of the first in her grade to lose her virginity. Whenever she’s thinking about a guy, she keeps in mind her three cardinal rules- 1. He has to be cute, 2. He has to be funny, and 3. He has to be a good guy. If a guy meets her standards, and she wants him, she sees no reason not to go for what she wants. Asking a question of no one and this conversational tone is too informal. Remove everything after "necessarily a boyfriend." I don't need the rest of this information. I got the gist.

And if you say one thing about Megan, you can say she’s a partier. She was just as competitive with her brothers when it came to partying as she was with rugby when they were younger, and by 15, she was able to drink them all under the table. Quite an impressive feat, considering her oldest brother was 6’4, 255, and had been drinking since he was 12. She drank beer, she drank whiskey, she drank wine, she drank vodka... she’d drink motor oil if it’d get her drunk. Her parents didn't care, not after she had turned 15; in their minds, she was a woman now, and an Irish woman should be able to drink and party as she wants to, as long as she was willing to deal with the consequences. That's the one thing they warned her about- any mistakes she made drunk, she'd have to deal with. But she was good at avoiding making trouble when she was drunk, and was able to enjoy herself. Some of the best moments of her life were hanging out with her friends, getting smashed in their basements, making jokes and making out. Tone problems here too. If who says one thing about Megan? Me? I'm not saying anything. I also feel like these parents are extremely cold to hand their 15-year-old a bottle of whiskey and wish her good luck. That seems incredibly irresponsible. Even parents who feel that 16 or 18 is the age when they don't have a problem drinking, I don't think any of them would encourage their child to be reckless or just tell their child that they are on their own.

Other than her friends Other than her friends, what? I feel like I missed part of this sentence. , she spent a lot of time with her family. Her family was always close, getting together all the time on vacations, playing a few annual extended family rugby games at least a few times a year. In addition, a tradition that she has with her parents and brothers is a hiking trip once every year during the summer. She loves the trip, and although she’ll never say it, she loves having her brothers around her on the trip. She puts on a tough act all the time, and she is tough, but she always enjoys that around her brothers she can show a more vulnerable side to herself.

Megan isn’t a straight A student, but she gets Bs and she’s happy with it. She’s not school smart, and she hates studying… if she looks at a textbook for too long, she’ll get a headache. But she’s not stupid, not by any means. She’s smart when it comes to everything out of school. She knows how to get out of bad situations, and she knows how to defuse them when they get out of control. She knows how to make sure her sex is safe, and she knows how to avoid a bad guy. Just to make sure, as she goes to college parties, parties in other parts of the town, and basically does put herself in situations where things could get out of hand, she attended rape prevention classes with her mother, and carries a rape whistle with her at all times. This is a lot of explanation for things that can be say simpler. Megan isn't a straight A student earning mostly Bs. She dislike studying but is clever outside of school, knowing how to deal with people and acting in a responsible manner where risky behavior is involved. Also, if she wears a rape whistle, why wasn't that in the appearance?

The rape prevention classes were simple tactics and techniques, and a lot of it was common sense, but it left her feeling more reassured. She knew where to hit a guy to stop him- other than the obvious location of testicles- and she knew the things to say to get people to notice what was happening. Luckily, she’s never have to put any of it into practice. It almost happened once, with a guy who was getting a little touchy feely and couldn’t take a hint, but Megan had gotten out of that one before things had escalated. Delete this. I don't need to know this information.

Megan is a girl, ultimately, who just wants to enjoy life. Whether it’s playing on the soccer team, listening to some music, hanging out with a guy, or just partying it up with her friends, she just wants to enjoy life. There are people who dislike her, and there are plenty of girls who talk down about her. She doesn't care though, and as long as her family and close friends know the person she is on the inside, she can let the other girls say whatever they want. Why do people dislike her? What are they saying? Who are these friends she hangs out with? She's on the high school soccer team? When did she join?

Advantages: Megan is a strong, athletic girl, and she’s good looking. She knows a lot of people in the school, and she’s strong willed and used to being on her own. She’s not incredibly smart school-wise, but she’s got a large amount of street smarts and practical knowledge. Because of her hiking trips and her father, she has a basic knowledge of surviving in the wilderness. She's used to being on her own? Since when? She's got a bunch of siblings. What sort of practical knowledge does she have? Her parents taught her survival skills? This is the first I'm hearing about it.
Disadvantages: She’s got an abrasive attitude, and she doesn’t like working with other people if they think she’s weak or vulnerable, or treat her as an inferior. Also, she’s not the best planner; often times, she lets instincts and feelings take over when it would be a far better idea to sit back and actually think over the situation. If she puts on such a tough act why would anyone think of her as weak or vulnerable?






So.....what do her parents do? I might have missed it, but I don't recall her parents having names either. How does she get along with the parents? This profile's main problem is with the tone in which you've written it. You have to imagine that a bored terrorist in a cubical is putting this together. Yeah, one knows way more than the probably would, but that's the sort of writing we look for in these. Once you go through and make the profile more conversational it'll be easier for me to see the content.
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