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| Topic Started: Nov 19 2012, 09:02 AM (490 Views) | |
| TheDollBreaker | Nov 19 2012, 09:02 AM Post #1 |
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Name: Sara Corlett Gender: Female Age: 17 Grade: 12th School: Aurora High School Hobbies and Interests: Playing piano, Reading and writing various forms of literature, Day Dreaming Appearance: Sara is 5'6 tall, coming in at about 135lb, making her fairly average. Being somewhat of an indoor person, her skin has a slightly pale appearance, but not enough to make her stick out amongst the crowd. Contrasting with her pale skin is her silky, straight brown hair, coming down to her shoulders; her bangs fall just above her almond-shaped blue eyes, which seem to have a perpetually sleepy appearance to them. She wears a burgundy pair of thick-rimmed glasses due to her less-than-impressive eyesight. Her small nose is slightly thin, as well as a bit pointy, and beneath it is a thin mouth with curved, plump lips. Her eyebrows are thin and dark, appearing almost black. On the day of abduction, Sara was wearing a black polo shirt, plain blue jeans, and black low-top sneakers. Biography: Sara's parents, Jonathon Corlett and Maria Caldwell, met in March of 1993. Jonathon was published fiction author, and Maria was a school teacher who loved to play piano. After they knew each other for a few months, the two went on various dates and eventually got married. In October of the following year, they discovered Maria was pregnant. Sara was born on July 16th, 1995, and went on to be the only child. From birth, Sara had poor eyesight, resulting in her wearing glasses for most of her life and being unable to see things that are far away. Because Sara was the only child, she lived a very protected life due to her parents' over-care. Instead of playing outside like most other kids, she would be found in her bedroom, usually reading a book. She never resented her parents for their worry, as she found reading to be more interesting than playing anyway. She learned how to read fairly early, and was reading through short novels during her first years at elementary school. This lead her to become somewhat distant from the other children, who'd bully her for being the odd one out. This resulted in most of Sara's childhood being spent alone, with few friends, and being introverted to this day. During the time she spent without a book, she would cope by day dreaming. Since she was ridiculed for reading about fantastic worlds and tales, she would create her own stories in her head. By the time she was finishing elementary school, Sara was incredibly creative and would write short stories in her free time, putting the imaginary worlds on paper. When her father read her stories and saw that his writing was rubbing off on her, his encouragement only fueled her inspiration more. Sara continued to read and simply imagine things past her bedtime, causing her to spend many days tired. She began to find that expressing her creativity with words wasn't enough for her, and approached her mother, asking to teach her how to play piano. She quickly learned the basics; she knew the various keys and chords by heart, she could read sheet music, and she soon began to improvise her own pieces. Her love of playing piano was rivaled only by her fear of attention, and so Sara kept most of her songs a secret, afraid of any criticism she'd receive or mistakes she would make playing in front of other people. By the time Sara began middle school, she vowed to break out of her introverted shell and make a few friends. Most of her attempts to do so ended in failure -- the conversations she tried to have with strangers were often strained and awkward. She couldn't find many students to relate to, as most of them weren't as interested in reading, writing, or playing piano as she was. Many students started to slack off around this time, procrastinating and failing to do work, and Sara found that she was the only one who enjoyed reading and writing assignments. In an attempt to fit in more with the others and get friends, she stopped doing homework, focused solely on day dreaming during class, and tried to do as little as possible and still drag by a barely passing grade. When she did write stories, the topics covered were much darker than before, touching on subjects like betrayal, death, and various types of horror. She read only in secrecy, but her tastes in reading had changed as well, transitioning from fantasy stories about wizards and dragons to gritty, realistic murder mysteries and such. Her mother, Maria, was both upset and concerned at Sara's sudden behavior, both threatening to punish and offered to help her daughter. Sara, feigning apathy, merely ignored her mother's words and took any punishment. Her misbehavior didn't help her at all, as she discovered that simply doing bad in class wasn't going to help her relate, and that most of the darker, emo classmates were essentially anti-social to begin with. By the time she realized this and panicked to do better, she found that her lack of attention caused her to learn very little over the past months. Under the stress of fixing her grades, she went many nights with only an hour or two of sleep, and a few without any sleep. While her grades in reading and writing classes managed to find their way back on track, Sara's grades in math, science, and history courses never fully recovered, causing her to get mostly C's and B's in said classes for the rest of middle school, which continued into high school. Giving up on her attempt to become more social, Sara returned to her original lifestyle by high school. She went back to wearing bland, uninteresting clothes and spending most of her free time reading and writing; however, she would sometimes socialize with others, although she'd be constantly anxious that they'd ridicule her for being her, and rather than face rejection, she chooses to let herself go unnoticed for the most part. She'd withdraw herself to the emptiest corner of the cafeteria during lunch, writing poems and stories. At first glance, many people assume she is just a shy girl, and nothing special. She dislikes living such an isolated life, but realizing her past attempts all ended in failure, she merely accepts it. She considers her ideal future after school to be living alone, in a quiet place, writing poems and stories. Despite her behavior around others, Sara decided to go on the senior trip, hoping that it will be an inspiration for her writing. Advantages: Sara is secretive, unwilling to let others know about her plans and such. Her antisocial behavior could scare her away from students who may be a potential threat. Disadvantages: On the other hand, her social awkwardness can make it difficult for Sara to find allies, and her fear of being an outcast can scare her away from joining a group. Her poor eyesight also renders her unable to see well in long distances, meaning she could be threatened by an enemy in hiding or be unable to hit a far away target. Edited by TheDollBreaker, Nov 25 2012, 12:24 PM.
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| Namira | Nov 25 2012, 06:09 AM Post #2 |
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Hey DollBreaker, I shall be your critiquer for this fine morning/evening/indeterminate time of day. Sara is temporarily denied, pending just a couple of changes. Firstly, I'd like a specific outfit for the day of the abduction, as for the main game, we're going to need something specific. Secondly, I'd quite like to see what Sara's current grades are, as you've put what they were in middle school but haven't elaborated. The implication is that she became a better student but I'd like some explicit indication of this. Also, if Sara is so incredibly shy and anti-social, I'm not sure why she'd be coming on a school trip surrounded by people she, by the profile's own admission, doesn't get on with particularly well/doesn't really want to be around. I'd like there to be some justification for this. Finally I'm not sure being a good liar is an appropriate advantage to Sara's character. Whilst being able to come up with stories is one aspect of lying, true, there are a lot of social and conversational cues to lying, and I can't see somebody as socially awkward as Sara being able to successfully execute those. The advantage either needs reworking, or to be removed and replaced. Let me know when you're done editing and I'll have another look. |
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| TheDollBreaker | Nov 25 2012, 12:25 PM Post #3 |
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Alright, done. |
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| Namira | Dec 2 2012, 12:59 PM Post #4 |
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This is a little bit awkward, because you've made the correct adjustments, but you haven't really added enough detail for my liking. As in, it's sort've the bare minimum of addition to cover what I requested. So to recap; * What are Sara's grades like now? How does she get along in class? Why haven't her grades recovered? I know it's tough to catch up when you hadn't been doing any work, but it seems a little implausible that after a number of years, Sara STILL hasn't managed to pick herself up scholastically. * Why does she feel the school trip would inspire her? It's to Disneyland, and the most recent notice we've had of her writing was in terms of it being gritty and macabre. These don't seem like particularly compatible aspects. I don't like knocking you back this way, but you really need to crank up the detail just a bit. |
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| TheDollBreaker | Dec 5 2012, 09:22 AM Post #5 |
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This might be a bit stupid, but I've joined a bit late in the pre-game and didn't get to accomplish much with my one character before V5 was announced to be starting soon. On top of that, I haven't gotten adjusted to the site altogether yet, so I think I'll pass up on V5. In other words, I forfeit Sara Corlett, and anybody can resubmit her, fix her up, use her, and so on. It would be interesting to see how somebody else would use her, if anybody does. If V6 rolls around and I'm able to start at a more appropriate time in the pre-game, I might return. |
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| MurderWeasel | Dec 5 2012, 01:07 PM Post #6 |
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Hiya, Dollbreaker! If you want, we can move Sara to the Abandoned characters section. If you want to pass her ff to someone else, just shoot me a PM saying who. That said, I'd like to encourage you to not get too worried about being new. A lot of very cool writers came into V4 with minimal or no pregame experience (current moderator Ruggahissy is a good example; she joined less than two months before V4 started and many of her characters didn't have much pregame time at all). If you have any concerns or need any help on site culture, feel free to PM me and I'll gladly help out to the best of my abilities. That said, there's also absolutely nothing wrong with waiting if you don't feel quite ready yet. There's also Mini for a lower-pressure environment, though it's not accepting applications at the moment as a game has just started. Post here if you decide you do want to abandon Sara, or if you make the edits on her. There's no hurry to decide. You can also always PM me or any other staffer.
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| TheDollBreaker | Dec 9 2012, 10:29 AM Post #7 |
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I've decided to abandon Sara. I sent you a PM telling you who to pass her off to. |
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| MurderWeasel | Dec 12 2012, 02:22 PM Post #8 |
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This character has been abandoned by the original handler. It is eligible for resubmission at any time by the handler to whom it has been passed off, pending edits requested by the staff. |
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