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Katarin "Kat" Tolstoff
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Name: Katarin "Kat" Tolstoff
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Varsity basketball, parties, socializing

Appearance: Katarin Tolstoff is one of the more attractive people in the class. She is 5' 9" tall and 140 lbs, giving her an athletic, toned physique, and noticeably, but not excessively, large breasts. She has straight blond hair that goes about an inch past her shoulders when she ties it back into her usual ponytail. She has an oval face with a small nose and piercing blue eyes that are occasionally framed by a pair of rimless rectangular glasses that make up for her 20/80 vision, although normally she wears contact lenses to correct the problem. Unlike most people, she does not have a navel, the result of surgery she got for an umbilical hernia when she was six weeks old.

She either wears athletic clothes when she's active, when she's not, she normally wears a collared or short-sleeved shirt and jeans or shorts, depending on the weather. On the day she was abducted, Kat was wearing a pair of black yoga pants along with a pair of Air Jordan 2012 Q's and a pink sleeveless tank top under her Aurora High varsity jacket.

Biography: Katarin Tolstoff was born to Russian immigrants Fyodor and Natalya, two minutes older than her fraternal twin Edgar. Fyodor was a partner at a medium-sized law firm and Natalya was a sous chef at a high class restaurant. As a result, Kat and her twin grew up pretty comfortably.

The elder Tolstoffs tried their best to be a part of their children's lives, however, their jobs and schedules meant that they were either frequently busy, in Fyodor's case, or had a disconnect in schedules, as was with Natalya. Nevertheless, they have tried their best to help out their children and be there for them when they can, although sometimes the only way they can show their love is through money. Kat appreciates when they can actually be there and has learned to deal with the latter.

From the beginning, there were stark differences between Edgar and Kat. While Edgar was much more introspective, preferring photography, Katarin was much more athletic and social, frequently hanging out with other kids and staying active. It was during a gym class at the age of nine that she found her true passion: basketball. Kat showed a natural talent as well as a genuine interest due to the quick pace of the game. As she continued playing, her parents installed a basketball hoop at their home and signed her up for a youth team at the earliest opportunity.

When Kat was in middle school, she started to grow into her body, and joined in with the more popular, pretty girls, taking pleasure in pop culture gossip and the occasional rip on other students. Her group of friends, combined with her attractive appearance, caught the interest of boys, an interest that was reciprocated. This interest mainly amounted in some flirting, as well as a couple dates with a few guys. Still, a lot of her time was spent on basketball - during the school year, she was on the middle school team, and over the summers, she went to some basketball camps as well.

Loyalty has always been a big thing for Kat. At first, it was due to the team oriented nature of basketball requiring her to do right by her teammates, as well as her close relationship to her brother. Katarin has drifted a little bit away from Edgar, but she still loves him dearly and is willing to stick up for him. Additionally, in high school, Kat remained with the popular girls. While a lot of them liked to party, Katarin gravitated to being the voice of common sense in order to ensure the safety of the group. Sometimes this meant steering them away from dangerous or illegal activities, but most of the time it meant she accompanied her friends to parties and other social events to make sure they stayed safe and relatively sober. Kat herself stayed out of most of the action, most of the time simply enjoying when she's socializing with the more sober people and sharing a laugh regarding the drunken exploits of others. She can occasionally parties during basketball season, but goes more often during the off-season.

When Katarin joined Aurora High as a freshman, she tried out for the basketball team at the first opportunity, easily making the team and improving consistently over four years and praised for her aggressive, yet calculating play. Her main position is as a point guard, although she does occasionally play as a shooting or combo guard. Much of this crossover is attributed to the two NBA players Katarin desires to emulate: shooting guards Michael Jordan and Kobe Bryant. As such, she is an excellent ball-handler, passer, and observer, as well as a very good shooter, specializing in hook shots and jump shots. Defensively, her agility and calculated aggressiveness on the court has made her very good at stealing the ball. On the flip side, Kat only possesses an average three-point percentage and is below average in blocking, relying more on taking the ball on the rebound. During the basketball season, she is very active, commonly found on the court in her free time. During the off season, she is more relaxed, shooting some hoops at home or at the gym about once a week, but mainly relaxing and enjoying the time off.

Katarin is currently in a pretty good position. She does decently in school, getting mostly B grades peppered with the occasional C+ or A. She mainly hangs out with the popular girls, but also with the basketball players, occasionally playing a pick up game. To those she's close to, she's a loyal, supportive friend, however, she does dabble in making mean comments about others with her friends. She also keeps an eye on Edgar, who she remains close to, as she is one of the few people who knows him personally. Her skills in basketball have attracted scouts, and a few colleges have expressed interest in giving her a basketball scholarship.

Advantages: Kat is, due to her time on the basketball team, quite athletic, being agile, tough, and both physically and mentally quick. Socially, she could use her looks to her advantage, or call upon her friends or her twin brother Edgar for support. She is willing to work with others to achieve a common goal, and looking out for her brother and friends has made her reasonably cautious.
Disadvantages: Kat and her group of friends, while popular, does have enemies, mainly among those students that they have insulted. Furthermore, Katarin is very loyal to others, and somebody could use that sense of loyalty against her. Finally, she is very close with Edgar, and if she were to lose him, she could take it quite hard, possibly to the point of a mental shutdown during a vital moment or an irrational rage at his killer.
Edited by decoy73, Mar 22 2012, 08:55 PM.
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Katarin Tolstoff is temporarily DENIED pending some adjustments.

There are some grammatical issues that need to be addressed.

"Katarin Tolstoff was born to a Russian immigrants Fyodor and Natalya, two minutes older than her fraternal twin Edgar."

You might want to remove the "a" from that sentence since the "a" refers to a single subject and there are two parents.

"It was during a gym class at the age of nine that she found her true passion: basketball. It was during a gym class when the class was playing basketball."

These two sentences are extremely redundant. Please combine them into a single, more fluid sentence.

"Loyalty has always been a big thing for Kat. At first, it was due to the team oriented nature of basketball requiring her to do right by her teammates. As Edgar and Katarin became teenagers, though, Edgar's introverted nature became slightly problematic, causing him to retreat into his own little world. Eventually, he was taken to a psychiatrist and diagnosed with obsessive-compulsive disorder. While he takes steps to successfully overcome this problem, mostly through therapy and his hobbies, Kat still worries about Edgar sometimes."

Since Edgar hasn't been approved, I'm going to ask that you remove any references to his mental issues. They can always be edited back into the profile for the final v5 submission assuming that Edgar gets approved.

Also, there is still very little information Kat's relationship with her parents. In what way is Kat's relationship with her parents "decent"? Why do they not speak frequently? What "support" do they provide? Is it just monetary support? Are they not home? Have they always been absentee parents? Do they support her athletic career? Do they make it her games to cheer her on? If they don't make it, how does that make her feel? I would really like to see the family section of her profile rounded out.

"The main exception was when she ended up in a threeway with Laura Nyquist and Adonis Alba, partially at the encouragement of Laura, and partially because she was somewhat attracted to Adonis at the time."

Since this was an important enough event in Kat's life for it to be mentioned in the biography, I would like some more details about it. How does Kat feel about this event? Is the exception that she was drunk or that she engaged in a threeway? Why did she feel the need to go along with Laura? Was there any consequences of this behavior? Has it affected her social status within the group or the school at-large?

Also, since "partying" is one of Kat's hobbies, does her partying ever affect her game? Does she only party in the off-season? And if Kat is the Designated Common Sense among her friends, what is it about partying she enjoys since she's not drinking? Please expand on this hobby/interest a bit.

Please feel free to PM me if you have any questions. Post here once you have edited and I'll give Kat another going over.
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I hate twelve-hour shifts.

Anyways, per your recommendations, the following edits have been made:

  • Grammatical errors fixed.
  • Threeway is no longer mentioned - the incident is still one of the few exceptions to Kat playing it safe, but since it's only because she joined the action, I felt it didn't deserve much elaboration.
  • Edgar's tendencies have been removed (at least until story gets back).
  • Kat's parents are unwilling absentees: They try to be there, but frequently cannot.
  • Her partying is done mostly in the off-season, and she simply socializes with the more sober people.
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