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Rutherford "R.J." Roger Jr.
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Name: Rutherford "Baby Ruth" Roger Jr.
Gender: Male
Age:17
Grade: 12th Grade
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Drawing, Self-Deprecating Humor, Baseball, Video games

Appearance: Rutherford stands at 5'6" and weighs around 130 pounds, with a skinny but somewhat toned body structure. His whole body is more slender and softer than most other boys, and his body just seems more feminine, besides his muscles. He's very pale due to being ill and is forced to stay in his own home frequently, and sunburns easily, especially during baseball season, and despite being half Mexican, looks completely white.

His dirty-blonde hair is curly and wavy, comes in at medium length, covers most of his forehead, and stops at the middle of his ears. He plays with his hair when he's thinking, like curling a telephone cord around his finger.

He has a sullen look about him, even when he's not sad. His face is slender and clean, with no facial hair or acne whatsoever, making him look a little bit younger than he actually is. His eyes, as described by many, are pretty, of a dark-blue with a hint of gray, with his eyelashes being long and dark, while his eyebrows are trim and slim. His nose is rather small, with nothing special about it. Due to these qualities he could be mistaken for a girl from a short distance away.

He usually wears a small hoodie. He has several, in a variety of different colors, the light yellow one being his favorite. He also usually wears dark Levi jeans and his favorite pair of black converse all-star sneakers, which he was wearing during the abduction.

Biography
: Rutherford Roger Jr. was born on October 4th, 1994, In Chicago, Illinois, to a soldier (Caucasian father Rutherford Roger Sr.) and to a Mexican mother (Paula Rodriguez). Ever since that day Rutherford or "Baby Ruth" as known to family and friends, was struck with bad luck. He had a very weak immune system, and, for the first few months of his life, he could barely breathe without the aid of a oxygen tank due to terrifyingly bad asthma. His immune system was so weak his parents and doctors considered putting him in a bubble, but decided his condition wasn't fatal enough for such drastic action, and he was allowed to live a normal life. Thankfully, when his father was stationed to Seattle, Washington, they're were no negative health effects. Even though he has allergies to dogs, he absolutely loves them, and even owns a German Shepard named Clover at his father's house (along with the necessary medication to own said dog).

When he was barely 2 his parents divorced, for what reason he still doesn't know (In actuality, his father had an affair). While Baby Ruth, his mother, and her children stayed in Seattle, his father and other sister were stationed to El paso, Texas. Despite this he remains close to both of his parents, and even goes hunting and fishing with his father whenever he visits him in Texas for the summer, where he's become a decent shot with a hunting rifle and fisher, and the fresh clean air helps him with his asthma. He's also thought of joining the U.S. Military like his father, but he believes he isn't even good enough to even enlist, mostly because of his health and low-self esteem.

Due to being the youngest of 5 children (1 sister from his father's last marriage (currently 20), and 2 sisters and a brother (currently 28,27, and 23 respectively) from his mother's last marriage) Ruth owned a very submissive and shy personality, since his older siblings would pick on him, mostly because his parents would have to give him undivided attention when he got sick, which was often, and whenever his parents intervened his siblings would call him weak or a baby, even though he never call out for help, and even at the earliest age of 4 he was deemed an "easy target".

When he started his school years he was never bullied, but he was always the chew toy amongst his group of friends, since he was weaker and smaller than the rest of the kids, and very gullible, but Ruth knew it was all in good fun. So Ruth figured if you cant beat 'em, join 'em. At this point in time Ruth even started to make fun of himself, making it his main form of comedy, and sometimes even surprising people with how funny he can be.

A lot of people wonder whether his nickname "Baby Ruth" comes from the famous baseball player or the candy bar, but in reality it comes from neither. He really only got it because he and his father had the same name, and it was just easier for his family to call Ruth "Baby Ruth", rather than call them both Ruth. Ruth doesn't really mind being called "Baby Ruth", "Baby", or sometimes just "Babe" by his friends, although it's rather awkward when he has to explain to somebody why all his friends call him that.

Ruth sometimes falls asleep in class, which he has become infamous for around school. This is due to him finding most of his classes boring (except art), and while not trying to be disrespectful to his teachers, he sometimes cant help himself. Because of this, Ruth only does moderately well in school and gets mostly B's, except in Math, where it's a low C, or in Art, Where it's an A. Ruth often gets scolded for his actions, and got detention once or twice, but he really does feel sorry. He's also a bit of a daydreamer and often gets himself lost in his own thoughts...which gets him lost in real life, mainly because of a combined force of him always looking at the ground and just a general bad sense of direction, although it never gets worse than him being a little late to class.

Due to being ill frequently, he's spends a lot of time in the nurse's office, but almost always has to go back to class since his mother gets tired of having to pick him up whenever he gets sick and wanting to him to have a good education. When ever Ruth actually does stay home, he plays video games, with fighting games like Mortal Kombat and Street Fighter being his favorite, and he's become quite good at them. Although he's prescribed eyeglasses (nearsighted), he barely ever wears them, preferring to hang them around his shirt, since he believes that they make him look dorky or ugly, even though they don't, only using them when reading or playing video games.

From a young age Ruth's artistic abilities were noticed and he was congratulated frequently.His drawings were the first things that somebody said Ruth was good at and he ran with it. He's even encouraged by other students, friends and strangers, to become an artist, although Ruth himself states he's not that great. His art is mostly illustration and is inspired by artists such as M.C. Escher, Edward Hooper, and Chris Van Allsburg, and becoming a children's book illustrator is something that he's actually aiming for. He's thought about joining the art club, but his other, meaner friends (constantly) remind him they think it's for wimps and losers.

Ruth is raised Catholic and even though he knows about the bible's teachings about sexuality, he can't help but have feelings and notice that the other boys are reasonably attractive, although he's kept quiet about this, and has of yet not explored this, and it's left him somewhat confused. He also likes girls though, but is very shy around the girls he has crushes on. His friends are mostly the jocks and popular crowd, which makes him stand out for his quiet and physically unimposing nature.

Ruth is a very nice kid, although its easy to take advantage of him due to his trusting nature, and people (especially his friends) just love to make him mad, since they find it endearing, but he's starting to wise up a bit. However, Ruth is described as scary whenever he gets pushed too far, although most of the time his rage is bottled up inside, but whenever it's released he just goes off on the person he's mad at. His friends and family really don't care how many fights he's been in (2 to be exact, in the 4 years he's been going to Aurora) as long as he wins, since they're proud he finally stood up for himself, which he has, but the one most disappointed in Ruth is himself, as he believes violence is wrong, and apologizes constantly to the ones he's hurt, even if they already forgave him. Ruth never got in trouble for his fights, because he was never the instigator, and everybody knows he wouldn't hurt anybody without reason.

Although he gets sick easily and is still somewhat frail he loves and plays baseball (The Cubs being his favorite team) and acts as shortstop, which has made his asthma better, and himself somewhat stronger and faster. Baseball also gives him a form of stress release, as it really lets him release all his pent up rage and energy, and his coach and teammates believe this makes him play better. When playing baseball (or doing anything he's serious about), he becomes very focused, giving full attention to what he seeks to achieve.

Although Ruth tries to be a peaceful person some things just cant be helped. When he's in a fight (which is to say the 2 he's actually been in), Ruth has to either absolutely hate the person he's fighting. His natural instinct in a fight is to do a well placed headbutt. With no prior training, Ruth is naturally nervous about getting into a fight, but wont run away or go down that easy. Ruth also has a very light step and is quite to a fault, often surprising people when he shows up. He's also very indecisive, especially if it's a conflict between friends as he doesn't want to hurt anybody intentionally.

His main motivation in life is to be a good son to his father, even if his father already says he's proud of him, which is why he started playing baseball in the first place. His father's opinion of him is crucial, because when his father was in high-school, he was on all the varsity teams and in all honors classes, his father being an image of perfection to Ruth, something he thinks is unobtainable for himself. This is due to low self esteem, and a belief that he'll never be as good at his father or his older siblings. Interestingly, this gives him an ambitious side to him that most people don't get to see, because he wants to see for himself if he can be just as good as anybody else.


Advantages: Kind and well-liked. Ruth doesn't have many enemies. Knows how to drive a motorcycle. His father has taught him some basic survival skills such as hunting and fishing, and he knows how to shoot a basic hunting rifle, but he's oblivious to any other kind of firearm. He's also very quiet and could go unnoticed for some time. He wont run away from a fair fight, and can handle himself fairly well.
Disadvantages: He has very low self-esteem, and he's very trusting of others which could get him into a trap easily. He also could die easily from an infection or an illness due to his weak immune system. His asthma could also come back to haunt him. His day dreaming and bad sense of direction could get him lost frequently, and he wouldn't know how to react if two of his friends started fighting each other. He's near-sighted, and he can't see that well without his glasses.


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Hi, artstanley!

At SOTF, we actually don't like profiles to be posted before they're complete. Please don't reply to this thread until it's been edited and Rutherford is ready for critiquing. Also, please be sure to follow the template including bolding of headers, and to keep the profile in an objective tone, like an impartial observer would use.

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Sometimes it can take staff a couple days to get to profile critiques, especially since there are a lot of them to get through and they require pretty concerted effort (in some cases, more than actually writing a profile, if there's a lot that needs fixing). We also have a backlog of these things and handle them in a specific order. The order is bottom to top of the page. By bumping your topic, you actually bump yourself to the back of the queue, by putting yourself back on the top.

You should reply to this post when you see it (mods only hit profiles where the last post is a user's). I just wanted to give you a heads up to help you understand the system and prevent you from causing any delays for yourself.

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Alright, I think i fixed everything, so now he's ready for critiquing.
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Hi, ArtStanley!

Rutherford's profile's a good start, but he is DENIED pending some notable revision.

First off, Hobbies and Interests should be things that a character takes an active interest in. Sleeping probably doesn't qualify, unless for some reason being asleep is a highlight of Rutherford's life.

"Rutherford stands at 5'8" around 140 pounds, with a skinny but somewhat toned body structure." is awkwardly phrased. It would read better as "Rutherford stands at 5'8" and weighs around 140 pounds, with a skinny but somewhat toned body structure."

"height" should probably be "length" when describing his hair.

", which he plays with when he's thinking, like curling a telephone cord around your finger." is awkward, and should probably be a new sentence, like so: "He plays with when he's thinking, curling it around his fingers."

You shouldn't include quotes in the Appearance section. You can just delete the quotation marks when describing his eyes.

I'm not really seeing how Rutherford's facial features as described make him appear feminine, especially given that his build does not sound particularly feminine. That bit should be elaborated upon or removed.

"He usually wears a small hoodie that comes in a variety of different colors, the light yellow one being his favorite, dark Levi jeans, and converse all-star sneakers, which he was wearing during the abduction." is awkward. I'd rephrase it as so: "He usually wears a small hoodie. He has several, in a variety of different colors, the light yellow one being his favorite. He also typically wears dark Levi jeans and converse all-star sneakers, which he was wearing during the abduction."

With a birthday in October of 1994, Rutherford would be 17 during V5 (which is set in early 2012, with the game taking place in late spring/early summer).

"Rutherford Roger Jr. was born on October 4th, 1994 to a soldier, Caucasian father Rutherford Roger Sr. and to Hispanic mother Paula Rodriguez." would work better as so: "Rutherford Roger Jr. was born on October 4th, 1994 to a soldier, (Caucasian father Rutherford Roger Sr.) and to Hispanic mother (Paula Rodriguez)."

I'd like to know where Rutherford's nickname comes from. Is it an intentional homage to the similarly nicknamed baseball player, or to the identically named candy bar? How does he feel about this?

How long was he on the oxygen tank for? What exactly was wrong with him that necessitated it? Why did his parents divorce? (I understand that he does not know, but information a character doesn't know may still be included in their profile)

I'm confused by this sentence: "He's also thought of joining some sort of military faction like his father, but he believes he inst good enough to even enlist." What do you mean by faction? I presume his father is in the US military, right? Is he active duty? Who does Rutherford live with? Also, "isnt" should be "isn't".

How much older than Rutherford are his siblings?

There should be a space after "personality,".

What is a butt monkey? This sounds like slang, which we don't really want in profiles. They should come across as if written objectively, by an impartial observer.

Also, why did his parents never intervene when his siblings picked on him? How did he feel about his status as family target? Does it persist to this day?

What about Rodney Dangerfield appealed to Rutherford? In what way was he a role model? How do Rutherford's parents feel about his self-deprecation? How is his self esteem?

What consequences have Rutherford faced for sleeping in class? Does anyone worry about him because of this behavior? Does he get proper rest at home? Similarly, has he ever made an effort to improve his sense of direction? Has getting lost ever caused anyone concern about him? Why does he get lost so easily? Being unable to focus to the point of getting lost often sounds like it could stem from potentially serious problems.

What exactly is wrong with Rutherford? What has been done to help him? Why are his parents not more concerned about him?

This: "His fastest time for leaving school is 4 seconds, immediately throwing up after getting out of his mother's car." is needless information, and should be cut.

How has he kept up so well with his schoolwork despite all his absences?

The second part of this: "He's thought about joining the art club, but his friends (constantly) remind him they think it's for: Faggots, Dykes, Emos, Pussies, Girls, Etc." is very informal and full of really offensive terminology. It should be rephrased. In fact, the whole profile needs some pretty serious tonal revision. It should all read as though written by an objective, formal outsider. Similarly, another proofreading would be helpful, as there are a lot of typos.

What type of art does Rutherford make? What does he enjoy about art?

The quote about Jesus and such is too informal, and should be removed. Also, I'm confused by the fact that Rutherford is stated to be raised Catholic but also to be from a very unconventionally religious family. Their practices don't sound like any branch of Catholicism I've ever heard of. "Christian" might be a better, less specific term.

How does Rutherford personally feel about religion? It's currently unclear.

Where on earth does Rutherford's rage come from? What has started his fights? What consequences has he faced? Fighting can be really serious. Has he ever had anger management? How do his parents feel about this? How does he feel about restraining his emotions?

How has Rutherford's time in baseball improved his health? What does he enjoy about it? How does it help him relieve stress?

How exactly does Rutherford surprise people? I honestly can't imagine someone passing unnoticed for half an hour among friends. Is he hesitant to speak?

I'd like his ambition to be expanded upon, please.

The last sentence ("Ladies and gentleman, Rutherford "Baby Ruth" Roger Jr., BUTT MONKEY EXTRAORDINAIRE ." is informal, and should be deleted.

No space should be skipped between Advantages and Disadvantages.

Rutherford's advantages should be rephrased to be more formal, and should all be complete, grammatically correct sentences. His knowledge of shooting and survival should absolutely come up in his bio and be expanded upon at length, because they are very serious advantages.

Bad luck is not a disadvantage. It's not a real, physical thing. At SOTF, we are very, very focused on realism, so all disadvantages should be realistic. Lack of leadership potential isn't really a disadvantage either; rather, being a good leader would be an advantage. I'm also confused about the decoy comment. It should probably be deleted for formality's sake. I'd like Rutherford to have a few more disadvantages, or maybe a few less advantages, to balance things out some more.

Post when you've got Rutherford edited, and we'll give him another look. Thanks!
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Alright, I read it over, and I think he's ready for critiquing again... and i didn't mean to offend or be informal
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Hi, ArtStanley!

Rutherford is looking a bit better, but he stills needs a little revision before he's good to go.

First off, this: "like curling a telephone cord around your finger." is distracting, because it's a sudden shift to second person ("your") that doesn't flow with the rest of the sentence. I'd explain it differently or, at the minimum, switch it to "his finger".

His hair should be referred to by length rather than height.

I'm still a bit unclear about Rutherford's androgynous nature. Is it just his face, or does he have an androgynous figure as well?

Why does Rutherford believe himself to be unable to enlist in the military? Is it related to his health? (This could be quite a valid concern, as they are fairly selective about that sort of thing)

You often don't skip a space prior to parenthesis, like so: "know(In actuality," "marriage(currently" and "brother(currently 28,27,". Please make sure there's a space before each parenthetical note.

I'd still like a bit more detail on his siblings picking on him. Why would they pick on someone so much younger than them? Why didn't his parents intervene directly? Similarly, in what way was he his friends' chew toy, given that it did not amount to bullying?

The reference to Justin Bieber can probably be removed. It's a bit overly specific.

"he sometimes cant himself." should be "he sometimes can't help himself."

"except in Math, where its a low C, or in Art, Where its an A." should be "except in Math, where it's a low C, or in Art, where it's an A."

"daydreamer" should be one word.

I still want to know a lot more about the actual consequences of Rutherford getting lost and falling asleep in class often, as outlined in my last post. Is he ever disciplined for his sleeping? Do people worry about his getting lost?

"proffering" should be "preferring"

I'm a bit unclear about Rutherford's vision problems. Is he nearsighted or farsighted?

Again, you can remove the quotes around "wimps", "losers", and the like.

"although he's kept quite about this and has of yet explored this," should be "although he's kept quite about this and has as of yet not explored this,"

Why do his parents not care about his fights? Why are they worried about him winning? What consequences ahs he faced at school and among his friends for these altercations? Does anyone worry about him letting out his frustration in baseball?

Why does Rutherford care so much about his father's opinion of him?

Only one line should be skipped before Advantages.

"Kind and well-liked Between most of the school Ruth doesn't have many enemies. His father has taught him some basic survival skills such as hunting and fishing, and knows how to shoot. He's also very quiet and could go unnoticed for some time. He wont run away from a fair fight, and can handle himself fairly well." should be more like: "Ruth is kind and well-liked. He doesn't have many enemies at school. His father has taught him some basic survival skills such as hunting and fishing, and he knows how to shoot. He's also very quiet and could go unnoticed for some time. He won't run away from a fair fight, and can handle himself fairly well."

I, once again, want a lot more detail on his gun experience and just what sort of survival training he has.

"bite him in the ass" is a bit informal.

Also, I'm still seeing Rutherford as being a bit unbalanced, leaning pretty heavily on the advantages side. You may want to tone a few of them down some.

Post when you've got him edited, and we'll give him another look. Thanks!
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OK, I hope i got everything you asked for, but hey third times the charms, right? Ready for Critiquing! *Tebows*
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Hiya!

Rutherford is looking much better, but I still have a few little things.

First off, somewhere in there, "Hobbies and Interest" got changed to "Hobbies & Interests". It's not a huge thing, but having uniform profile format is really important for getting stuff set up right on the wiki, so I'd like you to change the & to "and", please.

Next off, I'm a bit confused when you describe Rutherford as curvier than most men, since this seems to contradict him being skinny (and at 125 pounds, he's quite skinny).

This: "He had a very weak immune system, and could barely breathe without the aid of a oxygen tank due to terrifyingly bad asthma, which he had to use for the first few months of his life." would work better like so: "He had a very weak immune system, and, for the first few months of his life, could barely breathe without the aid of a oxygen tank due to terrifyingly bad asthma."

Here: "U.S. Military faction" "faction" should be deleted, as it is confusing.

"Respectively" should be "respectively"

I'm still a bit confused as to how being picked on in school by his friends wasn't bullying. I'm not saying it's impossible; I'd just like you to clarify if his friends meant it all in good fun, since I'm pretty sure that's what you're implying.

I'd still like to know if Ruth ever gets in trouble for sleeping in class.

"he's kept quite about this" should be "he's kept quiet about this"

I'm still a bit shaky on Ruth's anger issues, and I'd like this delved into more deeply. Did he get into trouble in school for his fights? I can buy him being scary when angry, but I don't see how it'd make him stronger, given that's he's a pretty frail kid. Does he just let go when he gets mad? I'd like that clarified a bit, please.

Also, while I can get channeling negative emotions in sports, I'd like to know a bit more about his conduct as relates to them. Is he just really focused, using the exercise as a release, or is he screaming during the games? (I strongly, strongly recommend the focused release version. :) )

Also, something I caught here: "he's scared of saying stupid or that he'll make a fool of himself." this doesn't really work with Ruth's willingness to joke about himself. I'd honestly suggest scrapping everything in that paragraph after the note that he has a light step.

Next, in Ruth's advantages: Headbutts are not a good idea in most circumstances. I'd change that to "Ruth has bbeen in a couple fights, so he knows what to expect."

This: "In a fair fight he has a chance, but compared to somebody who has years of martial arts experience, he's clearly out of his league." is not a disadvantage; it's the assumed norm. However, being nearsighted is a pretty big disadvantage, especially for someone who usually doesn't bother with glasses. You can add that there to replace the above-mentioned bit.

Finally, I'd like Sleeping removed from the Hobbies list, please. :)

Post when you've got Ruth edited, and we'll give him another look. Thanks!
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4 times for artstanley4... seems legit. Hope i got everything right this time, ready for critiquing! B)
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Hiya! Apologies for the delay here; this week ended up really busy for me.

Anyways, Ruth is looking good enough to be APPROVED for pregame. There are a few tiny fixes I'd like to ask you to make before the final game submission, though. Basically, I'd just like you to (before the final submission when V5 actually starts) give Ruth's profile a really thorough grammatical readthrough and edit (and if you need help on this, I'm available to walk you through it via PM. :)) Also, for the final draft, Ruth's motorcycle skills can be removed from his advantages, as they are very unlikely to come up on the island.

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