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Amaranta "Mara" Montalvo
Topic Started: Jan 15 2012, 08:57 PM (963 Views)
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Name: Amaranta Montalvo
Gender: Female
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Competing in pageants, debate club, student council fire performance arts, shopping.

Appearance: Amaranta is the picture of polished perfection and exotic beauty. She stands at 5’5’’ and weighs a slim 120 pounds, maintained by obsessive dieting. She has dark, reddish brown skin and almond shaped eyes punctuated by dark irises that are such dark brown they appear to be black. She has glossy, jet black hair that falls to her shoulders and, though she works to be thin, she still has a natural curvaceous build with rounded hips. Her nose is small and the only part of her appearance that irks her is that her lips are thinner than she’d like. She's quite skilled with make up and applies it with a light enough hand most days that it isn't noticeable on first glance, though she hates lipsticks because it draws attention to her lips.

In dress Amaranta is fashionable and her style is expensive clothes with close-to-the-body tailoring and favors monochromatic outfits, only occasionally pulling out bright colors. On the day of abduction she was wearing an H&M black button down shirt with accentuated puffs on the shoulders, a straight mini skirt with black and white horizontal stripes, black mary jane shoes with a silver buckle, and white frilled ankle socks.

Biography: Amaranta was born to Anthony and Lidia in Seattle, Washington. She has one sister, Rebeca, who is one year her junior. Her father is CEO of a large pharmaceutical company and though her mother has a degree in art history, she married Anthony straight out of college and has never had a real career of her own. Her father is of Mexican and Spanish decent which gives the sisters their dark complexions. The girls grew up exceedingly wealthy and have lived all their lives in Madison Park.

Amaranta and Rebeca were not particularly close growing up. Amaranta was outgoing, stubborn and outspoken while Rebeca was quieter and deeply interested in art, hoping one day to become a fashion designer. Their mother always favored Amaranta while their father favored the shyer, artistic Rebeca. This has always been a point of annoyance for Amaranta, who valued her father’s opinion more than her mothers because in her eyes, he is the more powerful role model who earns the money and has the more important role in society.

It became very important to her to win his approval. She entered into pageants at a young age, helped by her mother (who had been in pageants as a young woman). Amaranta is very successful with her exotic looks and her strange talent. Amaranta can’t much act or sing, so at age twelve she started in fire performing arts. She pulls out acts such as spinning flaming batons, hula hooping with fire hula hoops, fire twirling and other fire acts earning her the nickname “Spitfire,” not just for the fire talents but for her very short temper. Outside of her fire dancing and related activities, she hates exercise. Amaranta doesn't like running, finding it distasteful to break a sweat and isn't very strong.

She works hard in school, earning good grades in all of her subjects, though she hates math and is more inclined towards English class. For all of her achievements and her aggressive competitiveness in all aspects of her life (which her father encourages) he still dotes more on Rebeca and this angers Amaranta. She makes fun of Rebeca whenever she can and plays cruel little pranks on her younger sister.

While her father pushes her and pushes her to be best without ever really returning the praise she wants for the things she achieves, her mother dotes on her constantly, telling her how special she is. This combination has made Amaranta very narcissistic. She honestly thinks that she is better than her peers most of the time and doesn’t bother with people unless she feels they are on her level.

Recently at the start of her junior year of high school the family found out that Anthony had cheated on Lidia. This affected the girls in different ways. Rebeca withdrew more, their mother became depressed and Amaranta was left to try and deal with the aftermath. It is of supreme importance to Amaranta that others think that her life and family are the best of the best so she took it upon herself to keep the house running by making sure errands were done, organizing the house staff, taking care to make sure Rebeca always looked presentable, and comforting her (to keep up appearances, she does not honestly care about the emotional wellbeing of her sister and becomes even more resentful that she has to help her).

Her push to gain her father’s love and approval through accomplishments became even more manic starting senior year. She competes frequently in pageants, ran for student council, joined the debate team and works on the school newspaper. Deep down, she’s afraid that he’ll stray again and this next time will leave the three girls for good. Her trying to be the best is her own way of trying to make sure that her father stays near and is an attempt on her part to control something that she, as a young girl, really has no control over.

Amaranta is friends with only the most popular and wealthy students at Aurora. She believes that this is the proper crowd for her and does not even consider ever hanging out with others. Her humor is mean spirited and part of making herself feel better about her situation is to make the occasional mean comment to a classmate. She is very vain as unfortunately, she finds her pageantry and the comments she gets about her beauty to build a lot of her self worth. She’s a smart girl, but her looks are what she thinks are her best attribute. If anyone should suggest that another girl, especially her sister Rebeca, is prettier (both sisters are lovely), Amaranta will fly into a rage. She often tests her friends by asking them which sister they think is prettier and there is hell to pay should they answer incorrectly. She has had a few relationships, but it is difficult for her to trust boys after what has happened with her father. She also only pays any mind to only the most popular and wealthy boys, looking for flashy husband material.

Advantages: Amaranta is smart, determined, beautiful, aggressive and selfish. She knows how to take charge and perform in a leadership position.
Disadvantages: She hasn’t been the nicest girl in the world to people outside of the popular crowd and may have gained enemies. She truly thinks she’s better than others and as a result, she underestimates people constantly which could throw her off. She hates physical activity and isn’t very strong or fast. She has an explosive and very short temper. The past year has been a time of great stress to her and she may hit a breaking point with the addition of even more stress.
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Hiya, Rugga!

Amaranta's profile looks good, but she is temporarily DENIED pending a few adjustments.

First off (though I noticed this last), there should only be one line skipped between Appearance and Biography and between Biography and Advantages.

"She has dark, reddish brown skin, almond shaped eyes punctuated by dark irises that are such dark brown they appear to be black." needs an "and" after "skin,".

"She has glossy, jet black hair that falls to her shoulders and though she works to be thin, she still has a natural curvaceous build with rounded hips. " should be "She has glossy, jet black hair that falls to her shoulders and, though she works to be thin, she still has a natural curvaceous build with rounded hips."

"close to the body" should probably be hyphenated like this: "close-to-the-body".

The list of her clothes is a bit awkward. I'd repunctuate it like this: "On the day of abduction she was wearing an H&M black button down shirt with accentuated puffs on the shoulders, a straight mini skirt with black and white horizontal stripes, black mary jane shoes with a silver buckle, and white frilled ankle socks."

"Their mother always favored Amaranta while their father favored more on the shyer, artistic Rebecca." reads a bit awkwardly. I'd rephrase it like this: "Their mother always favored Amaranta while their father favored the shyer, artistic Rebecca."

"It became very important to her to win his approval. She entered into pageants at a young age, helped by her mother who had been in pageants as a young woman and is very successful with her exotic looks and her strange talent. Amaranta can’t much act or sing so starting when she was twelve she started in fire performing arts." reads oddly. I'd adjust it to "It became very important to her to win his approval. She entered into pageants at a young age, helped by her mother (who had been in pageants as a young woman). Amaranta is very successful with her exotic looks and her strange talent. Amaranta can’t much act or sing, so at age twelve she started in fire performing arts."

"she took it upon herself to keep the house running by making sure errands were done, organize the house staff, take care to make sure Rebecca always looked presentable and comfort her" would read better as "she took it upon herself to keep the house running by making sure errands were done, organizing the house staff, taking care to make sure Rebecca always looked presentable, and comforting her"

"her father’s love an approval" should be "her father’s love and approval"

"news paper" should be "newspaper"

"that she as a young girl, really has no control over." should be "that she, as a young girl, really has no control over."

"If anyone should suggest that another girl, especially her sister Rebecca is prettier (both sister are lovely) Amaranta will fly into a rage." should be "If anyone should suggest that another girl, especially her sister Rebecca, is prettier (both sisters are lovely), Amaranta will fly into a rage."

Finally, Amaranta's dislike of physical activity should come up in her bio.

Post when you've got her edited, and we'll give her another look. Thanks!
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Cheese and crackers, that was awkwardly worded. Fixed it up ^_^;
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