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Ezekiel Davis
Topic Started: Jan 14 2012, 03:45 PM (424 Views)
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Name: Ezekiel "Zeke" Davis
Gender: Male
Age: Seventeen [17]
Grade: Twelve [12]
School: Aurora High School
Hobbies and Interests: Chatting with friends, Music, Relaxing, Having a good time

Appearance: If it weren't for the relaxed attitude with which he held himself, he could be very intimidating, as he stands fairly tall at 6' 1”, and weighing in at 185lbs, of which most is muscle. He tends to gel his fairly long blond hair up in a completely random and unstructured way, in an attempt to exacerbate the rock-ish image he presents of himself.

He has a fairly tanned complexion, and his face is rather muscular and sharp, though the small, chilled smile that is on his lips and expressive ice blue eyes helps to offset whatever connotations this might put in ones mind about him. He usually has a light covering of stubble that he shaves just enough to not let it turn into a beard, but enough to keep the light covering there.

He tends to wear very fairly in fashion clothes, keeping on top of the trends as much as he can, whilst still mixing it up enough to keep his own brand of style. He generally wears zip up hoodies of the branded variety, zipped up about halfway to show of a t-shirt, that either bears a rather a witty remark or a striking image. His choice of trousers is fairly erratic, wearing cargo pants one day and chinos the next, though loose or boot cut jeans are most common amongst them. His choice of footwear is usually trainers, with his current pair being black Nikes. He also wears a small silver cross on a plain black necklace underneath his clothes.

Biography: Ezekiel was born in a rural area of Michigan to Evelyn and James Davis, on the 14th of November, 1994. He attended the local church, which functioned as a school for the small community, for most of his early years. All was good with the family for a few short years, until 2 weeks before Ezekiel's 5th birthday, his father lost his job at the local factory. Which forced him to find new work elsewhere. Ezekiel was naturally curious as to why they were moving, to which his mum would always reply that "God is just testing us, sweetie".

After a few months of drifting, subsisting off of their life savings, they found their roots in a much larger community, namely, Seattle. It was here that his father had managed to find another job, as a warehouse manager in a local company. This sudden change threw off the young boy, who had become accustomed to, and enjoyed, the vast open spaces out in the countryside where he could run around and climb trees and do anything he pleased. His Mum, as always was on hand to dispense little pearls of wisdom like "Try everything once" or the seemingly ever present "God is just testing us". Ezekiel took the first of these to heart, and has tried to be as open minded as possible, trying to make the most of what he had.

Those first early days out of the gated community were undoubtedly the toughest of his life. Whilst he managed to steer away from violence, or even being socially outcast, he was picked on by the locals for a number of reasons. First and foremost, his "weird" name. However, he saw this as God testing his ability to adapt to a new flock, and so he did. Going from Ezekiel, the goody two shoes choir boy, to Zeke, the chaotic, but all around good friend. This transformation would have shocked many parents, but his parents took it in their stride, understanding how tough it must be for him, adapting to a new community. They did however make him promise two things; First, to never give up on religion, and secondly, to never, ever, get involved with crime.

It was during the latter years of middle school however, that he found his true passion: Music. It was during break-time that he heard the deep rumble of a bass guitar through the walls, and walked in on band doing practice. Sure, he'd heard music before, but never anything that wasn’t classical or opera. He proceeded to save up his pocket money for a long time, and then bought a second hand electric guitar at a garage sale. Whilst his parents couldn’t really afford for him to have music lessons, he tagged along with the band until they left, and during that time, they taught him the basics of playing. He would practice in his room for hours, writing his own little solos and tunes.

When he reached high school, his transformation that had started so long ago was complete. He was now Zeke, the rebellious rocker. And whilst people still knew he was religious, it bothered few people, though some people take exception to him because of it, which he was fine with. After all, if they couldn’t accept him for who he was then he didn’t want to be friends with them.

He formed a band as quickly as he could. The small band, composed of a singer, himself and a drummer, played in a few small gigs, doing covers of various rock songs. It was during their second gig, that he was introduced to the drug sub-culture that thrived in the party scene. He however was very apprehensive about this, knowing about the dangers of addiction, and the promise he made to his parents ringing in the back of his mind. As such, he stays clean of everything, and though he drinks on occasion, he doesn't make a habit out of it.

During these parties he developed slightly promiscuous tendencies, thanks to the lead of his friends and the gradual acustomisation to it. This lead to him sleeping more for pleasure than love. It was during this phase that he discovered he was bisexual, and though he hides this from his parents, knowing their staunch attitudes towards sexuality. He does however, try to keep in contact with those he sleeps with and tries to stay friends with them. He has however had no serious girlfriends or boyfriends, believing he'll know who he wants to spend his life with when he sees them. Of course, there are exceptions to this, with a few people breaking up badly with him. He feels guilty about this, seeing himself as having neglected or taken advantage of them somehow, as he can come up with no other reason for what happened to really come between them. As such, he tries as best he can to repent for this, by trying to make up with them when possible and being as good a friend as he can to those who break up cleanly with him.

Internally, he rationalises this behaviour as moral, as he is simply doing something that brings him and others pleasure, and as there are no dangers to himself or others, how can it be wrong?

He still seems, to his parents at least, as a good example of a child. He rarely argues with his parents, and attends church every Sunday almost without fail, and keeping himself fairly fit. He may be a little airy, and his friends might not be the best of influences, but teens will be teens. He in turn, is very close to his parents, loving them deeply, and respecting their judgement most of the time, though he does disagree with them on a few things that are close to him, he generally keeps quiet about it, as he doesn't wish to upset them. As such, his life at home is fairly untroubled, as his parents almost never disagree, with arguments being incredibly rare in the household, even by normal standards.

His attitude towards religion has laxed somewhat over the years, though he still deeply believes in the existence of God and regularly attends church, where he pays a lot of attention to what is said, he tries to follow the spirit of the the teachings rather than what is actually said. As such he is very forgiving, and almost never loses his temper, and on the very rare occasion when something does raise his ire, he responds with words rather than fists, seeing violence as something beneath him.

His grades at school are below average, floating at a D-C level, due to him not really caring for academics, seeing music as much more fun and therefore more deserving of his time. His parents are of course, not entirely happy with this, as no parents would be, but he promises them that he'll knuckle down and revise when the time really comes. Outside of the academics, school life for Zeke is now fairly fun and easy, having woven himself into the social fabric with little trouble over the most recent years and whilst he doesn't fit into any particular clique, his easy going attitude and willingness to listen to what people have to say has won him friends in most social circles. He also attends a fitness club after school to try and keep himself as fit as possible without going into any sport in particular, as he doesn't want it to take up time from his band.

Advantages: As a very social creature, he likely has a large group of friends he could turn to on the island. In addition, the long nights spent partying have given him a very good stamina and musculature, despite having never really applied it.
Disadvantages: His decisions are still governed by his strong sense of morals, meaning that he will be unlikely to bring himself to hurt anyone, let alone kill. Also, his happy go lucky, trusting attitude may lead to him trusting the wrong person on the island.
Edited by Frozen Smoke, Jan 17 2012, 03:11 AM.
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Hey FrozenSmoke! Ezekiel's profile is a good start, but it's DENIED pending a few changes.

Firstly, you say that most of Ezekiel's weight is muscle. However, there's no indication in the profile that he does any activity that would keep him muscular. How does he maintain his weight and strength without training? What does he do to remain in shape?

In the Bio, you mention that Ezekiel was born on the 14th of November 1995. That would mean that in the beginning of his Senior Year (November 2011), he would have turned 16, making him 16 during the game. However, in the Bio you state that he's 17, and in order to be a Senior in High School, he would probably need to be 17. If you could change his birth year to reflect this, that would be great.

You also say Zeke is a very social person. What groups does he usually hang out with? Is he a member of any particular cliques? Does he ever antagonize people, or is he generally friendly to everyone?

I'd love to see a bit more about his relationship with his parents. Is he close to both of them? Do they approve of his behavior? Is there anything that they do together? Do they fight often? Are they a happy family? What do his parents do for a living? How does the family function economically?

I'd like to see some expansion on Zeke's religion. Does he still go to Church? Does he himself believe in God, or does he just go along with what his parents are doing? Has he become distanced from the Church over the years, or does he maintain a deep religious belief? It seems like an important part of the character, and I'd like to see more of it.

Post when you have the edits, and I'll take another look!
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Right, added a few lines that show him as a more active person, and mentioned a fitness club that he goes to.

Wow, that was a horrific math fail on my part there, sorry!

I generally tried to imply that he was generally just friendly to everyone, but I added a few bitsd and pieces that detail that.

Expanded the existing paragraphs on that subject a little, but well, there's not much to say about it, as I envisage his home life is fairly simple and easy.

Added a few more tit bits on his religion and how it impacts his life.

Hope I got everything, and I look forwards to your response!

Edited by Frozen Smoke, Jan 15 2012, 08:05 AM.
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Zeke looks better, but he's still DENIED pending just a couple more additions.

Firstly, there's a couple nitpicky grammar issues in the profile- namely a few misplaced commas, sentence fragments, and a run on or two. If you could just run the profile through a grammar check, that'd be great, and it'd make the profile a bit easier to read.

Next, you mention that Zeke's religion bothers few people "outside the highest social echelon." My question here is why Zeke's religion would bother specifically popular people. It would make sense if it bothered random scattered people, but for it to irritate an entire group for no reason other than their popularity seems off to me.

Finally, Zeke's promiscuous attitude and his religious beliefs don't quite mix. Why did Zeke start sleeping around? Does he ever feel guilty about it, or does he really not care? How do his personal choices affect how he practices his religion? If you could make this connection a little clearer, that would be great.

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Right, there we go. Hopefully I nabbed all of the grammatical errors in there.

I also expanded a bit on his promiscuity, and replaced that bit about popular people disliking him.
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Zeke's almost done, but he's still DENIED for right now.

My only issue is this quote that you added on your last round of edits.
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Internally, he rationalises this behaviour as moral, as he is simply doing something that brings him and others pleasure, and doing it as a conscious, godly decision, rather than letting sin reign in his mortal body.


I don't see how having sex is not letting sin reign in his mortal body. Lust is one of the seven deadly sins, not to mention that premarital sex is a huge no-no in the Bible. I can see Zeke rationalizing it by "it makes me feel good so how can it be bad?" but I guess I can't really get past him actually thinking it's somehow a moral decision when he's probably been raised to believe the opposite. If you could edit the profile to make this clearer, that'd be great.

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Ok, appended it slightly. If that still doesn't make real sense, let me know and I'll rewrite it a bit more!
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