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Ross Baker; Poly's #2
Topic Started: Mar 8 2009, 03:45 PM (432 Views)
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Name: Ross Baker
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Grade: 12
School: Bayview Secondary School
Hobbies and Interests: He focuses mostly on being an offensive guard for Bayview’s football team, but in his spare time he enjoys listening to 60’s rock music, having attempted to learn the guitar a few years ago.

Appearance: Ross stands tall at 6 feet, and since he constantly works out he has a muscular body. His thick blondish-brown hair is short and combed back for the most part, but sometimes sticks out in the front. Most people would say that he has pretty average looks; his face has a few blemishes on it, it's clean-shaven, and his skin is tanned slightly but barely noticeable. He has bushy but neat eyebrows and green eyes that can be considered big along with a larger-than average forehead and ears, but not too big that they look strange on his face; in contrast, his nose his smaller than his other facial features. On the trip he was wearing an orange t-shirt, brown shorts, and brownish-black sneakers; with a Vikings cap on his head.

Biography: : Ross is a very fortunate person. Why? Well first of all, his father Julian Baker is the General Manger of the St. Paul branch media service company. That of course, means that he has quite the paycheck, and he can provide his wife and three children with a three story home and private schooling.

Ross himself is the youngest of these three children, and he has been blessed with the ability to play football better than most of his classmates. It, of course, let him to join the football team of his private school at the time; Benjamin Kubelsky Academy, where he first started playing about

So yes, he has a very desirable life; he lives in a rich home, his family, teachers, and most fellow students never seem to act badly towards him, and he's a valued member of the shool football team Well, actually he has a certain mental problem. Not some mental disorder; it’s something much simpler: anger. He can’t control himself when he gets really angry. Not most anger though, just very extreme cases. So, since he has such a good life, he hasn’t gotten THAT angry since he was a little kid, as little kids often do for little or no reason. That was fixed with anger management therapy.

However, it happened again in his sophomore year. He got into a big argument with the team quarterback that escalated into personal insults, which escalated into Ross attacking him right in the middle of practice. Ross came out with minor injuries, but the other guy's injuries were more major.

Ross was soon expelled, and by his own choice, he switched to Bayview, the local public school instead of another private school. In the following years, with more therapy, he went back to his usual self, a friendly, popular student who usually never fought anyone. The events of the whole incident were leaked into the school, but it is considered more of a legend, with no actual evidence as far as the students know. While some of the student body doesn't believe something such as that, some less sceptical students do, which provided a few problems back when he was still a sophmore and still some problems in the present. With his therapy, whenever anybody tries to accuse him of anything he manges to keep a calm deposition, and so far he's been able to avoid any fights or long-term enemies.

Something that Ross has fairly recently tried to take up due to his love of 60's music is the guitar. There was a problem, even with lessons Ross couldn't seem to learn to play any basic songs correctly. This had disappointed him quite a lot, and he gave it up, but still tries to practice with it every now and then.

Advantages: He’s a big and strong football player, so he won’t have trouble in fights. He has many friends and no enemies in the school, so he’ll have no problem gaining allies. His rage can actually help him in fights, so it could be an advantage unless the person he's fighting has a gun.

Disadvantages: Despite the private schooling, Ross isn’t exactly that smart. He's also a little to trusting of his friends, many of which are unpleasant to less popular students and are prime candidates to play. His anger could be his downfall, it could make him lose allies quick and get him killed. Lastly, he doesn't have any fighting experience beyond that one fight, and physical strength can only get someone so far.
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His description could stand to be fleshed out a bit more. I get the general idea of what he looks like, but there's a lot more description that could be added. Remember, you want everyone to have the same mental picture of Ross that you have. ;)

In terms of his bio, there are a few areas for improvement. You mention his family at the beginning, but we know next to nothing about them other than they're wealthy and his father has a well-paying job. How does he get along with his mom, his dad, and his older brothers? Also, you can't really consider a person "perfect" because they play football well. If you're going to make a statement that bold, you might wanna give us more to back that up. :P

So, he has anger management issues. It's a neat concept, and it's something that should be interesting to watch play out in-game. The only problem I really see with this is that it seems like 95% of the profile is based around this one fact. A person generally holds a lot of characteristics, and while it is one major thing that sets him apart from other students, just make sure that one aspect of his personality doesn't consume him.

He's friendly, popular, and usually doesn't get in fights. That's fine, but how did he go from being the new kid in school to being popular? I'd also recommend refraining from making comments like "no one believes" or "he has no enemies" in character bios, as you can't really control how other people think and feel about your character. If another handler wanted to make John Q. Doe hate Ross with a passion and believe all the bad rumors about him, they have that right. In situations like that, it's better to say "most people don't believe the rumors" and "he doesn't have many enemies that he knows about". That way, you aren't unwittingly godmodding other peoples' characters.

Also? In the advantages section, you mention that he's big and strong so should have no problem in fights, but does Ross have any actual fighting experience, other than the one incident at his old school? One other thing I'd like to see you include in the bio is his interest in guitar. It's something that adds a little more realism and feel to Ross, so it'd be nice to see it included as more than just a passing interest. ;)

Soo, review the profile, spruce it up a bit, and post here to let the staff know when it's complete, then we'll review it again for you and you'll be on your way to pre-game!
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Spring cleaning. :D

Yeah, this profile was from when I had writer's block (and I still do with freakin' David Morris). I expected having to spruce it up a bit.

I added a few bits to his appearance, I hope that's enough. I added something about the relationship with his family and no fighting experience, more hoping.

The whole incident happened in his sophmore year so he had time to becoe popular, added some thigs to make that more understandable.

I put in quite a bit about the "rumors" thing and his guitar, I doubt you'll find much wrong with that.

To sum this stuff up: I modified it.
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