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Joseph Cande
Topic Started: Jul 20 2008, 01:45 AM (390 Views)
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Name: Joseph(Joe) Cande
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Grade: 12th
School: Southridge High School
Hobbies and Interests: Track and field, swordfighting, ninjas

Appearance: White in between tan and pale, 5'8, 130 lbs, lean build. He has very short brown hair, no facial hair(His inability to achieve any really pisses him off), green eyes, and typically wears a black long-sleeved t-shirt and black pants that fit him reasonably tight, as well as black shoes. He brought a ninja hood with him.

Biography: Joe comes from a middle-class family. His father is a mechanic who spends most of his time working, his mom works as a secretary and tends to be busy all the time, so Joe doesn't connect much with either. His parents tend to leave him to his own devices, but they still try to stay involved.(You know how you can tell parents have given up on trying to control their kid but they don't want other people to think they're bad parents so they still try anyway? It's like that. If you can understand it. >_>) He often finds himself watching(Mainly he makes sure the draino is out of reach, but still) his baby sister, who is almost 1. They've had the occasional money problem, but nothing too serious. Joe's kind of dim, and as a result his grades are nothing special. His parents often give him lectures and such, trying to get him to focus more to do better in school, to little effect. He typically gets Cs, a trend that's been consistent since the wee days of grade school.

Another trend that's stayed with him since then - an obsession with ninjas. It's his most prominent trait; he's typically talking about ninjas, or reading ninja books, or doodling ninjas doing ninja things(Like riding killer robot dinosaurs and throwing atomic bombs at whatever is annoying Joe currently). He almost always carries with him some kind of book on ninja training, and takes it seriously even though it's mainly a joke book. This leads to several bad decisions. He also attempts to utilize his ninja skills(unsuccessfully) frequently. He participates in track and field(running fast is very ninja-like), and has bought/rented several instructional videos/books/etc. on swordfighting.

Joe is quite energetic, has difficulty being serious serious, and is almost eternally restless. This tends to get on people's nerves, and as a result he doesn't have too many actual friends, although he's generally nice enough that people will tolerate him. He tends to make over-exaggerated hand motions while he talks. He's not particularly charismatic, but is quite friendly and a little overly trusting. He's also quite courageous.
Joe has no idea what he wants to do with his future. He’s given it less then no thought. Whenever the topic comes up he just says he never plans for anything and changes the subject.

He tends to be friends with the other members of the track team, in a combination of how he's rather good at the sport and in that the other members have spent enough time around him to adjust to his zany antics. It's not a universal rule though(In case someone's on said team and is way antisocial or something). He tends to be unpopular with the bully crowd. Other then these groups, he's mostly neutral with everyone; often met with an eye roll or a sigh however, which Joe stays completely oblivious of.

Advantages: After spending his whole life googling, reading, and practicing ninja sneaking, Joe's picked up a few tricks to stealth. Being on track and field makes him a fast runner. After learning quite a bit about swords, he's not bad with one(Although he'd still likely get his ass kicked).

Disadvantages: Despite the research, Joe still really sucks at being sneaky. Consulting a joke book is a poor solution to most, if not all, problems. The line between courage and stupidity is blurry to the point of being invisible in Joe's mind. Joe dislikes guns, as they are not very ninja-y, and wouldn't use a gun if given one. Joe has too much faith in his "ninja abilities" and may try to do something completely retarded in response to a threat. Actually, he’ll probably do something stupid in response to anything, really.
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B102-Cande, Joseph; Chapel(KO)
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First and foremost, please refrain from posting to bump your registration topic. The staffers have other things to do besides approve profiles, it'll be reviewed when time permits.

His appearance section is a little bland and, like I pointed out to another newcomer yesterday, while you gave us general information about his appearance (height, weight, hair and eye color), you failed to communicate what he looks like to us. The point of the appearance section is to make the character design in your mind be vivid enough that others can see him the way you do. If you need help with ideas, I'd recommend this guide on our wiki.

His biography section also needs to be fleshed out a bit. I'd say that you definitely conveyed the fact that Joe is hardcore into ninjas. The problem is, we don't know anything else about him, except for that he makes average grades. I'd suggest expanding on his family and friends, maybe how his peers feel about him, stuff like that.
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First and foremost, please refrain from posting to bump your registration topic.  The staffers have other things to do besides approve profiles, it'll be reviewed when time permits.

Well everyone else's characters were getting approved and I thought this slipped under the radar, but if you were gonna tell me that I didn't do it right then it makes more sense. Sorry. d:

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His appearance section is a little bland and, like I pointed out to another newcomer yesterday, while you gave us general information about his appearance (height, weight, hair and eye color), you failed to communicate what he looks like to us.  The point of the appearance section is to make the character design in your mind be vivid enough that others can see him the way you do.  If you need help with ideas, I'd recommend this guide on our wiki.

His biography section also needs to be fleshed out a bit.  I'd say that you definitely conveyed the fact that Joe is hardcore into ninjas.  The problem is, we don't know anything else about him, except for that he makes average grades.  I'd suggest expanding on his family and friends, maybe how his peers feel about him, stuff like that.

Well I was talking about making an average character(Unless I wasn't I dun remember...in any case, I was wanting to do that) and this is him(Oh god, that makes him average Joe. XD That wasn't even intentional. Awesome.), so it's a little bland on purpose. I noticed I left some things out that I thought I put in, though, so I added those, and then I added a little bit more.
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I'd like to add on when it comes to fleshing out the biography. Talk about his family, is his closer with one parent more than another? Does he have any younger or older siblings? Because of the family's money trouble was the parents in the picture a lot or was an older sibling, him, or another family member have to watch over the kids.

What led to this ninja addiction, what point in his life did he start on this ninja thing like crack? Is he close with his track and field teammates (I know there's a few other characters already on the island that where on the team, my Ianto included) or does he just annoy him as well. Does he even enjoy being on the track and field team?

As you can see there's a lot of question you can ask yourself to help us get into the character's life to understand what he was like coming onto the island. Even if he is just an 'avenge joe' it doesn't been you can stray away from juicy details. :3
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I added stuff. >_>
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