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Introduction Thread
Hiya, watcher, and welcome to SOTF!

Check out the chat, the Mini, and the New Handler's Guide.

Pregame is still open, and remains open util right around the start of V5 proper, so you can still participate once your character is approved.

If you've got any questions, feel free to PM me or any other staffer (we have colored names). We hope you enjoy it here!

V4 Read-A-Thon: The Reboot
Here you go!

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Turtle Tyrant: Morgan Leftowitz (V4 Start)

V4 Read-A-Thon: The Reboot
Here you go!

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Espional: Saul Fetteralf (V4 Start)

Rugga's Shutter!
Those are very nice! I love the lighting. It makes the rain look very nice.

Ethan Johnson
This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested from the staff.

Fantastic milestone
Random Thoughts and Elena have almost the same post count.

Fantastic milestone
We'd only need 351 posts per day, rounded down.

Fantastic milestone
Mm hm! Elena's been doing it as long as I've been here. I've been looking forward to one for a couple weeks now, since I saw we were close.

So, yay for 100,000 posts! Here's to the next 100,000. :)

Introduction Thread
Hiya again, Pixie! You should have time. V5 won't be starting for at least 3-4 weeks, probably a bit longer.

Rugga's Shutter!
Those are really cool! This inspires me to do more stuff, except my camera's a bit less advanced probably because it uses floppy disks for film. ><

Anyways, awesome pictures! The first one in the zoo isn't showing up for some reason, but I went directly to the link and got it that way.

Timothy Abrams
Hiya, Skraal!

Timothy's profile's looking a lot better, but he's DENIED pending a little bit more editing.

"perfect" doesn't need quotation marks; this post explains why we're trying to phase them out.

"After he graduates, he plans ancient history in college" should be "After he graduates, he plans to study ancient history in college"

How does Timothy pay for his modelling hobby? Also, it sounds a bit like what he's into is Warhammer and stuff like that. Is it correct that he's into models with an attached game component? If so, does he ever play with other people?

I'd like more on Timothy's parents as they relate to him, and also as individual people. Right now, they always function as a unit, which is a bit odd. I also know less about them than Timothy's uncle, even though they're a much bigger part in his upbringing. I'd just like more detail on each of them (and Timothy's broth) and how their relationship has developed over the years.

I'd like a bit more on Timothy's social skills in his bio. What does he struggle with, exactly? How does it affect him in normal life?

The limits to Timothy's knowledge as currently framed are more of a caveat for an advantage than a disadvantage. They should either be move to accommodate that or clarified some more (might he overestimate his knowledge?). Also, he sounds like he's been exceptionally sheltered, which might count as a disadvantage.

Post when you've got Timothy edited, and we'll give him another look. Thanks!

Opal Lamb
Hiya, Nytie, and welcome to SOTF! Apologies for the wait; the post-holiday time has been very busy for staff.

Anyways, Opal's profiles is a good start, but she is DENIED pending a good bit of revision.

First off, the hobbies and interests list should be in list format only, and should only really cover what a character is currently interested in.

Next up, what's Opal's natural hair color? How often does she redo the bleach? Bleaching can be really uncomfortable, and is also hard on hair in the longterm. How long exactly is Opal's hair? Long isn't quite as descriptive as I'd like.

"to much makeup." should be "too much makeup."

I'm a bit confused by Opal having embarrassed herself trying to be fashionable. An interest in fashion implies that she spends enough time on fashion that she'd probably be able to at least realize when stuff wasn't working with a mirror.

I'd also like some more description of Opal. What are her notable facial features? Does she have any piercings? How's her posture?

Moving on to her bio, the big issues I have are relating to detail.

What sort of movies do Opal's parents work on? Most of the profitable movie business is more in California. Why did they spoil Opal? How did they deal with her behavior? She may be charming with them, but schools don't cater to spoiled kids much, and tend to let parents know if their kids act up like Opal is described as doing. Basically, I'd just like a ton more detail on Opal's childhood, how she grew into the habits she has now, etc.

Why would nannies spoil Opal? Nannies are paid to raise children well, and my experience has been that they are often highly competent at this, often possessing lots of experience raising kids.

Kung fu movies haven't been a huge thing in a long time.

Opal's martial arts experience and problems at school need a lot more detail. What happened? When? How did she feel about this? How did her parents react?

Where do Opal's issues with criticism come from? Have they caused her problems? Have her parents sought help/anger management for her?

I need to know a lot more about Opal's friends and interests. Where did her hobbies come from? Why does she like them? What does she do with her free time? What classes does she like? Which does she struggle with?

Why does Opal worry about dating?

I'd like a bit more detail on Opal's training and manipulative abilities in her bio. Right now she doesn't sound super convincing outside of dealing with her parents.

Being unsuited for the outdoors is basically the assumed default for high school students; Seattle's a pretty urban city, so a lack of experience in the wilds isn't unusual enough to count as a disadvantage.

On a related note, a lack of martial arts/hand to hand combat skill is not a disadvantage. It is, in fact, the assumed norm for an average high school student. That Opal has any experience is actually a notable advantage, and should be put down as such.

I'd like to, in light of this, see Opal have a couple more disadvantages.

The big thing, though, is detail. Check out some of our approved characters for an idea of the level of detail we'd like to see in profiles.

Post when you've got Opal edited, and we'll give her another look. Thanks! :)

Introduction Thread
Cool!

Yeah, another thing I'd recommend (for anyone new, really!) is to pick a few V4 characters to read through, to get a good feel for how the game progresses. Current realism standards got started in mid-late V3, and V4 was the first version to mostly aim for and hit an acceptable level of realism throughout. V5 will, of course, hopefully be better.

Introduction Thread
Hiya, white lancer! Welcome to SOTF!

I recommend you check out the chat, the Mini, and the New Handler's Guide. Also, if you haven't already, take a look at some newer writing (especially V4), because standards and site culture has changed a lot since V1.

If you've got any questions, feel free to PM me or any other staffer (we have colored names). We hope you enjoy it here!

Michael Fischer
This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested from the staff.

Leona Van Kamp
This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested from the staff.

V4 Read-A-Thon: The Reboot
Here you go!

logs

Maraoone: Erik Laurin (V4 Start)

V4 Read-A-Thon: The Reboot
Here you go!

logs

Espional: Rena Peters (V4 Start)

Away
My activity may be reduced over the next two days, as my nephew is probably gonna be born sometime between now and tomorrow evening (it's a couple weeks early). So, yeah, I have no clue to what degree this will affect me but if I'm less present that is why. I should be able to stay on the ball with posts and stuff, though.

Ryan Nemeth
This character biography has had no alterations for more than two weeks and has been put in the abandoned characters forum. This profile is eligible for resubmission by the handler upon alterations requested from the staff.