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My first shot at a poem...
Topic Started: Aug 14 2005, 02:26 PM (129 Views)
Xenogias
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Midnight Wolf
Keep in mind, I aint a poet, I dont really do Poems, but constantly looking at this section... its sorta made me wanna come out of the closet (not that way... but not like theres anything wrong with it... but im not <_<).

Strings...Solliete

All tied up, hanging on your words, your words,
like string, keeping me alive, keeping me close to you
and holding me in all directions. I hear your voice and
all I can do is smile...

I remember the day we met and I wonder how you've
been. We've told each other how we felt about each
other... Im no longer afraid to fall in love.

However... love is a word I rarely use. Love never
found me, never helped me, never cared for me. My
heart is in pain without you by my side.

Tears might fall, blood might spill, death might come,
but we still have each other. Somehow always had,
somehow always will. So now I want to get the point
across...

Yes we're diffrent, depressed, unknown, love is the
string that ties us together, tied up and twisted... the
way we'd like to be.


That actually took me a while to think up (like a whole day)

Please give me your all out honest opinions - as I am not really easily offended (or offended at all) by bad critisism. I'd really just like to know your honest opinions.
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-claps- That is very good. Good job!
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hmmm words used in poem
love...check
heart...check
pain...check
tears...check
blood...check
death...check
depressed...check
twisted...check
Crying Devil rates this poem... solid

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Xenogias
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lol. Well, I didn't mean to put depression in it. But that doesn't matter. So you guys really think its good? D:

Maybe I should do poems more often <_<
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All I have to say is stick with the fighting games. lol.

Ok maybe I'm joking just a little bit, but then again I'm not a fan of many poems so that might be a top rating one for me (I've only seen like 3)
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Xenogias
Aug 15 2005, 09:29 AM
lol. Well, I didn't mean to put depression in it. But that doesn't matter. So you guys really think its good? D:

Maybe I should do poems more often <_<

I thought you did a good job. Keep brining the poems. Poetic!
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Aug 15 2005, 03:44 PM
All I have to say is stick with the fighting games. lol.

Ok maybe I'm joking just a little bit, but then again I'm not a fan of many poems so that might be a top rating one for me (I've only seen like 3)

yeah, all i know is seeing Iori do his rage of the 8 maidens always makes me feel better than any poem did :lol:

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Xenogias
Aug 15 2005, 06:29 AM
lol. Well, I didn't mean to put depression in it. But that doesn't matter. So you guys really think its good? D:

Maybe I should do poems more often <_<

Yeah it was good, and yes you should do more.....*sigh*
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Let the rain fall from the heavens like the tears from my eyes..
:clapping: I really liked it. It's...like love....but warped...Really nice..I think u've got some potential, so I hope u post up another one. :) ;) :D


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Xenogias
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Whats the 'sigh' all about?

Come on BV, if you got something on your mind you should just let me know :P I did ask for an honest opinion, afterall.

And, thanks Kiriko. I'll probably do another one in the next few days, though lately i've been busy with my forum and whatnot.
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it reminds me...of me and alex
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