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| Tweet Topic Started: Aug 14 2005, 02:26 PM (129 Views) | |
| Xenogias | Aug 14 2005, 02:26 PM Post #1 |
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Midnight Wolf
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Keep in mind, I aint a poet, I dont really do Poems, but constantly looking at this section... its sorta made me wanna come out of the closet (not that way... but not like theres anything wrong with it... but im not <_<). Strings...Solliete All tied up, hanging on your words, your words, like string, keeping me alive, keeping me close to you and holding me in all directions. I hear your voice and all I can do is smile... I remember the day we met and I wonder how you've been. We've told each other how we felt about each other... Im no longer afraid to fall in love. However... love is a word I rarely use. Love never found me, never helped me, never cared for me. My heart is in pain without you by my side. Tears might fall, blood might spill, death might come, but we still have each other. Somehow always had, somehow always will. So now I want to get the point across... Yes we're diffrent, depressed, unknown, love is the string that ties us together, tied up and twisted... the way we'd like to be. That actually took me a while to think up (like a whole day) Please give me your all out honest opinions - as I am not really easily offended (or offended at all) by bad critisism. I'd really just like to know your honest opinions. |
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| Destroyer Angel | Aug 14 2005, 02:28 PM Post #2 |
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The Angel Of Destruction Is Back!
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-claps- That is very good. Good job! |
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| Crying Devil | Aug 15 2005, 03:44 AM Post #3 |
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hmmm words used in poem love...check heart...check pain...check tears...check blood...check death...check depressed...check twisted...check Crying Devil rates this poem... solid |
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| Xenogias | Aug 15 2005, 05:29 AM Post #4 |
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lol. Well, I didn't mean to put depression in it. But that doesn't matter. So you guys really think its good? D: Maybe I should do poems more often <_< |
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| Chaos Moon | Aug 15 2005, 07:44 AM Post #5 |
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All I have to say is stick with the fighting games. lol. Ok maybe I'm joking just a little bit, but then again I'm not a fan of many poems so that might be a top rating one for me (I've only seen like 3) |
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| Destroyer Angel | Aug 15 2005, 12:50 PM Post #6 |
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I thought you did a good job. Keep brining the poems. Poetic! |
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| Crying Devil | Aug 15 2005, 01:08 PM Post #7 |
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pw3nd by teh iori
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yeah, all i know is seeing Iori do his rage of the 8 maidens always makes me feel better than any poem did :lol: |
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| Bebi Vegeta | Aug 15 2005, 01:53 PM Post #8 |
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Yeah it was good, and yes you should do more.....*sigh* |
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| Ruby | Aug 15 2005, 01:55 PM Post #9 |
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:clapping: I really liked it. It's...like love....but warped...Really nice..I think u've got some potential, so I hope u post up another one.
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| Xenogias | Aug 16 2005, 05:24 AM Post #10 |
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Whats the 'sigh' all about? Come on BV, if you got something on your mind you should just let me know I did ask for an honest opinion, afterall.And, thanks Kiriko. I'll probably do another one in the next few days, though lately i've been busy with my forum and whatnot. |
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| Huy2b | Sep 12 2005, 09:04 PM Post #11 |
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it reminds me...of me and alex |
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I did ask for an honest opinion, afterall.
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