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Topic Started: Feb 1 2009, 11:32:14 AM (258 Views)
Zigludo
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Lately I've been trying to use these pens my club president recommended to me. Maybe I just need to draw bigger or press much lighter, but the lines are coming out really bold-looking (not what I'm going for).

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Aside from that, I know the hair looks weird (still trying to find an effective way to do hair, haven't really found one I like yet). Please, tell me what you think and offer any criticisms. Try to be specific and helpful.
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Zigludo
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Oh, here's this from earlier today as well. Was trying to use screentones and failed again, as usual. Gave up halfway through because I made too many mistakes. >_> Aside from that, the linework has a couple issues (the skirt and button area of the shirt, primarily). I actually liked the pose and facial expression here though.

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Heads look a bit "detached" in both images, right leg in second image looks a big weird as well.

Otherwise, I can't see any major problems.
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Zigludo
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What do you mean by detached heads? I don't quite understand.
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They look like they're... In a slightly off angle, and slightly too far back. It looks like they're "floating" behind the neck.
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i like second pictor
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What Tubba said about the second one's right leg. Seems a bit of a strange pose to me.
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Second pic is excellent, but it needs a more bent right leg. Right now it looks like she's just floating in air, not pushing off from the ground. Try making her foot bend at the toes.
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"Batman-" "Bat-Turian." "Whatever."

A little definition in the right kneecap area would go a long way towards resolving that issue, methinks. Right now it looks like her leg is just a hunk of metal.
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Zigludo
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Thanks for the help so far guys. I think I'll try to redo the second one.
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Zigludo
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Well, I did redraw it... with partial success. The hair looks worse than ever, but I was trying something new and it didn't work out so well. >_>

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Pose looks better overall I think, though I couldn't get quite the same natural feel with the face. Tell me what you think.

Maybe I'll even try it once more.
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MARF SANTANGELO
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i think the face feels different because of the different hair
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The legs are right. It looks like she's springing forward. I'm not sure what you were going for, but drawing the lower half going farther "back" would make it look like she's springing forward. Now it looks more like she's springing on one foot, mostly in place. But looks good at it.

The face isn't quite as good, but I can't explain why. Might honestly just be the hair. Otherwise, right on, a solid pic.
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