| WE HAVE MOVED! http://www.coloholicsanonymous.com/index/ |
| [AAC] Maleni Hesperact; Dark Eldar | |
|---|---|
| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 20 2008, 07:09 PM (97 Views) | |
| At Any Cost | Oct 20 2008, 07:09 PM Post #1 |
|
Face down in the gutter, won't admit defeat
![]()
|
Name: Maleni Hesperact Age: 472 Gender: Female Rank: Warrior Home World: Commoragh Sect: Cabal of the Crippled Fist Psychic Potency: No Portrait: ![]() Appearance: Like something out one of Tim Burton's wet dreams. She's built like a tall, statuesque, elfin, corpse-pale brick house. Thick black hair pulled up in a tall ponytail, fetchers sharp enough to draw blood. Maleni has a tally of kill marks tattooed into her skin and a few relatively mundane piercings, by Eldar standards anyway. Clothes: Boots, bracers, and a combat harness, that's about it... History: Maleni is a Commoragh girl born and... well, we're not much past born at this point really. The Crippled Fist gave up Malleni to the colloseum before she was even out of the cradle. It was a strictly metaphoric cradle, we're talking about dark Eldar here. Since infancy she's been trained in the traditional schools of sadism, cruelty, theatric torture, and artistic murder all in the hopes that she might eventually prove herself worthy of initiation into one of the wytch cults. Now Maleni is entering a sort of journeyman phase in her tutelage, she'll wander outside the limits of Commoragh for the first time and discover new and exciting ways to make things bleed. Personality: Maleni holds the whole damn galaxy in contempt. The whim of the Cabals, the decrees of the Archons, great Vect himself, even the looming threat of She Who Thirsts are all meaningless to her. They are the dusty decrepit monuments of the past, too trapped in dreary miseries of the past to appreciate the pleasure and the pain of the moment. Attributes: Strength: 2 Intelligence: 2 Dexterity: 6 Charisma: 4 Constitution: 2 Credits: 200 Max Amount of Renown per Mission: 380 Current Credits: (I put this in) Current Amount of Renown: (I put this in) Equipment: Mesh armor, Splinter pistol, War knife. Rp Sample: It was like... well, like rain. They said it still came down in some parts of the City. She'd heard about rain but she'd never seen it. She imagined it'd sound something like that, a gentle little pitter, patter, drip, drop, pitter, patter sound. It sounded so sweet but it was over so quickly. She wanted to hear it again. Maleni wondered, briefly, if rain was supposed to be red. She'd have to ask someone. Maleni moves like a cut throat humming bird through the mob. Her right hand, clad in her favorite toy, traces a pattern of gentle lines along arteries and veins. She's conducting a symphony one handed. She's listening to the rain. It's overwhelming. There's just so much new out here, outside the City limits. Too many new tastes, new sounds, new pains, new pleasures. Just so much to take in. Like the sound of the rain. She wanted to hear it again and again and again. Edited by T.Nori, Oct 28 2008, 06:35 PM.
|
[RPGData:335|2|-3|34|5|5|21|3|Chaos Bow|None|Ranger|23|None|None|3|2|0|0|None|1|None|None]The hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradle
| |
![]() |
|
| Amakard | Oct 21 2008, 07:27 PM Post #2 |
![]()
|
Ok i like the start and its all nice but i think the description is too short just a litel more give here something to really stand out in the description like tell me of the tattoo s and what they mean to her. Tell me some more history she is old that is a lot of time and well needs some more she is evil tell her exploits from dead babies to her conquests. |
| |
![]() |
|
| At Any Cost | Oct 21 2008, 07:42 PM Post #3 |
|
Face down in the gutter, won't admit defeat
![]()
|
You do get that she's barely out of puberty, right? And, yeah, while a young Commoragh girl's fancy may turn in that delicate time to thoughts of flesh dolls, pain pups, and the shapely bodies of certain gladiators I'd rather keep those particular creepies implied rather than explicit. |
[RPGData:335|2|-3|34|5|5|21|3|Chaos Bow|None|Ranger|23|None|None|3|2|0|0|None|1|None|None]The hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradleThe hand that rocks the cradle
| |
![]() |
|
| Amakard | Oct 21 2008, 08:25 PM Post #4 |
![]()
|
OK I'm sorry i meant evil victories not sexual ones like what gladiator match defines her. |
| |
![]() |
|
| Amakard | Oct 26 2008, 06:31 PM Post #5 |
![]()
|
aac your aproved just give me a minute to refresh the dark eldar part of my head Edited by Amakard, Nov 5 2008, 11:08 AM.
|
| |
![]() |
|
| Amakard | Nov 5 2008, 11:08 AM Post #6 |
![]()
|
http://s10.zetaboards.com/Coloholics_Anonymous/topic/7031896/1/#new Your good to go! |
| |
![]() |
|
| 1 user reading this topic (1 Guest and 0 Anonymous) | |
| « Previous Topic · Archives · Next Topic » |
| Track Topic · E-mail Topic |
6:36 AM Jul 11
|
Hosted for free by ZetaBoards · Privacy Policy








6:36 AM Jul 11
