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[T.Nori] Ryojin Keizenku; Bounto
Topic Started: Sep 28 2008, 07:21 PM (138 Views)
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

General Information

Name: Ryojin Keizenku

Alias: n/a

Gender: Male

Age: 225

Birthdate: Oct. 21, unknown year

Birthplace: Soul Society research lab

Current Residence: n/a

History:
Birth and Imprisonment
Ryojin was created and raised in the same manner as all other bounto. He was givin a doll same as the other bounto, and he was included in the list of bounto that 2nd squad was tasked with eliminating. When Ran'tao tried to help the bounto escape, Ryojin was one of the many refugees that attempted to break for freedom. However, he was caught by twelfth squad members who, to put it nicely were about as sane as Mayuri. Knowing the dangers that it carried, they still deducted that the bounto were failed experiments but that they would use Ryojin to perfect the bounto and make them perfect, mindless servants of the shinigami.

After decades of painful and grueling experiments, such as attempting to enhance reflexes and grafting Ryojin's doll into his arm, the group thought that they were on the verge of creating the perfect bounto, become famous blah blah blah. They were trying to give Ryojin added muscles. When they were attacked by special corps members. The council of 46 had learned about these experiments and deemed that Ryojin must be destroyed and the fanatical squad 12 members arrested and brought to justice. While the latter was performed and the squad 12 members sentenced to the den of maggots. Ryojin managed to escape out of pure luck during the confusion of the fight and fled into the depths of the soul society.

Training
Ryojin ran and ran as far as his legs could bring him after escaping the 12th squad fanatic's lab. His run would've attracted attention but thankfully it was night in soul society and not many people were around to notice him. As he neared the entrance gates he was attacked by a single stealth force operative, and the two engaged in a brief fight. The stealth operative mercilessly beating Ryojin before drawing his zanpactou. Ryojin raised his arm in defense and it was then his doll first emerged, out of pure instinct. A bolt of lightning fired out of Ryojin's arm and electrocuted the soul reaper, killing him instantly.

Bruised and beaten, Ryojin desperately continued to flee, adrenaline pumping even harder through him after realizing that the flash of light the lightning had produced was more than likely to attract attention. He managed to sneak past the gatekeeper and fled into the Rukogaki, taking up residence outside the 78th district.

For the next few years, Ryojin attempted to figure out how to summon his doll. Eventually he figured out and after that he tried to gain complete control over his doll's powers. The resulting 'training' caused frequent stray lightning bolt and lightning storms to strike the forest and the 78th district. The extensive damage, death and time needed to rebuild the district eventually became it's downfall and christened it the worst district in the Rukogaki, though the death's were also due to Ryojin's need to feed on plus's. A century later Ryojin was ready and his doll's powers were at the state he deemed necessary to survive. After that it just became a matter of escaping.

Escape
The first thing Ryojin did after mastering his doll was to learn as much about the soul society as possible. After many raids on the 78tht district and grabbing as many books on the soul society as he could. After reading all of them he decided to break back into the soul society. The easiest way to do that was to break through one of the gates and incapacitate a gatekeeper, harder to sat than to do. The easiest way to do that was at night he attempted to take out the northern gatekeeper. The attempt was largely unsuccessful he still managed to break the gate and jump through it.

Once inside the first think he tried to do was get near the shinigami academy. This alone was a problem that took a few months tot deal with as he was forced to evade the entire rukogaki and the stealth operatives. Once he reached the academy however it was a simple matter of waiting until a group of students went to the human world to learn how to perform a konpactou and when they opened the portal he jumped through it before they could. The resulting chaos of seeing some random guy jump out of no where and leap into the human world allowed Ryojin to appear in the human world without being chased.

In the human world
The first thing Ryojin saw when he entered the human world was stunning beauty. He had never seen anything like it. The scenery, the people in strange clothes, the souls floating around. For Ryojin it was a world waiting to be discovered. The first thing he did was learn as much as he could about Japan (where he had arrived). From there he moved onto Russia, Britain and America. During these decades he learned every language from the places he was in and besides feasting on plus's. Increased his already formidable doll powers. He was too busy having fun to notice the outbreak of WW2, and by the time Kariya had spurned his bounto revolution across the sea, Ryojin was in Canada finishing mastering his doll.

His presence did not go unnoticed however and Ryo Udagawa tried to convince him, by force to join the Bounto revolution. Ryojin proceeded to beat him to the point where when Ryo returned he did not mention to Kariya that he had found Ryojin out of shame.

Ryojin finally returned to Japan as the battle over Karakura town was commencing. As it ended he came across the cave that Kariya and the other bounto had lived in and took all their documents with him. After learning about the bounto's failed attempt to destroy the soul society he was contacted by a La Rosa member, and immediately accepted.

Appearance

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Physical Appearance: Ryojin stands at around 6"1. He has an large, impressive build thanks to the 12th squads experiments on him. Despite this he has an aura of power and has a powerful stance. He has black hair and strangely glowing gold eyes. His face tattoos extend throughout his body.

Clothing and Armor: Ryojin usually wears a light brown jacket similar to Kariya's with a white undershirt. He also usually wears light brown dress pants, dark brown dress shoes and white socks.

When expecting trouble Ryojin changes into a 'battle armor' that he has put together from various 'liberated' pieces of soldiers equipment. This consists of a kevlar chest plate with thin sheet of metal over it. metal grieves and shin guards. And a SWAT member's helmet.

Personality: Ryojin was a kind, friendly soul before 12th squad got their hands on him. Now he is a cold, sarcastic individual who rarely takes anything seriously. He regards the bounto as his precious kindred and is quick to forge alliances and relationships between them and himself. He regards Vaizard and Quincy with a stark indifference. The only people he hates are shinigami. Aizen's or not he views them as scum who need to be put in their place.

Visual Age: 25

Doll Information
Doll Name: Blitz

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Sealed Object: Ryojin's object is a small black stud in his wrist that is surrounded by a strange circular pattern. Unlike many bounto when he releases his doll all that happens is a beam of lightning fires out and takes on the form of blitz. Blitz can be killed if Ryojin's wrist is pierced.

Release Phrase: "Zeige Dich, Blitzkrieg"

Doll Powers: Ryojin's doll has three stages.

Stage 1: Simply put, this is when Blitz is in it's main form. In this form it's weapons are a lance and a shield, both crackle with electricity. Blitz can generate and shoot bolts of lightning (anime speed so they're dodge able, maximum of five bolts at a time), created blazing barriers of electricity and basically wield lightning, however, regarding any power other than firing lightning bolts and the lightning barrier, Ryojin must first summon storm clouds and draw on the lightning from there. Blitz can fight however the process takes a while and if Ryojin's concentration is broken in any way the clouds dissipate and must be re-summoned. Summoning storm clouds takes a small amount of time.


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With a thought, Ryojin can command Blitz to turn into the above seen spear (with the shaft thats missing in the pic). In this form Blitz's powers remain the same, the only difference is that now Ryojin can use all of Blitz's stage 1 powers, though he as well must generate storm clouds. Blitz can switch between stage 1 and 2 indefinitly.

Once Ryojin engages in stage three he cannot revert to stage one or two, he must reseal the doll altogether and when he does he will be incredibly fatigued and weak.

Role Play Sample:
The night sky over Karakura town was even gloomier than usual with the massive rainstorm that spanned the entire city. Off in the distance occasional flashes of lightning could be seen, followed by the roar of thunder.

Above the town, a dark hole widened and yawned as two shinigami dressed in protector uniforms stepped out. As the two scanned the area one noticed a lone man walking down the street. To a normal human he'd appear to be like any normal human, face tattoos aside, but to any others they'd notice the interesting level of reiatsu that surrounded him. The two nodded to each other and the first silently dropped behind the man, the second continuing to hover in the air above him.

On the ground, Ryojin continued walking, the black stud on his wrist was thrumming slightly, a sign that Blitz was active but not out in the open. He himself wouldn't have noticed the protector sneaking up on him and if not for Blitz whispering to him "Behind you" he would have been taken by surprise.

Whipping around Ryojin muttered "Zeigh Dich Blitzkrig" and a spear appeared in his hand and he lashed out at the surprised shinigami, taking his head off. He watched casually as the body slammed into the ground, again not noticing that the second protector was diving towards him.

In an instant Blitz had materialized into his 'human' form. His shield raised to deflect the oncoming protector, who leapt away slightly surprised. Not turning to look at him Blitz spoke with an air of disappointment in his voice "This is why I keep telling you not to engage in that human poison of yours, it slows your reflexes and makes your mind dull". Looking up at him slowly Ryojin sighed and muttered back "I was quick enough to kill that other shinigami wasn't I? And shut up about that, I only drink every once in a while".

As they continued bickering, the protector used shun po to appear behind Ryojin, raising his sword to deal a killing blow. Blitz raised his hand and Ryojin turned to look at the shingami "You should tell your master to do your research. Next time you fight me, try to do it when it's not pouring". Before the shinigami could respond a bolt of lightning from the clouds above struck him and fried him in an instant.

Watching as the last protector fell. Ryojin turned away and continued walking "We might as well report back then" he said solemnly "He might not care but he should at least know that it seems Aizen's getting a little more serious in his assassination attempts"
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Blitz can shoot bolts of lightning (anime speed so they're dodgeable), created blazing barriers of electricity and basically control lightning in any way he can think of as long as it stays within certain boundaries (No electrocuting the city)


One problem I had with this was the part about controlling lightening anyway you want. I want this ability to be in line with the scientific principles. You can't spontaneously create lightening out of nothing. Your doll can shoot them, but it's just unrealistic that you can control lightening in the broad day light. Even if it is a stormy night, you can't create lightening on the ground. You can say that they fall from the skies.

Another problem I had with your ability is the 3 stage. Maybe, I should wait to see what they do; however, as we see Koga did, two stages seem the most reasonable. Third stage just gets little too powerful. We will see what happens though.
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Negro please.

Also, I found the "KARIYA WAS WRONG, I'M DA FIRST BOUNT" thing retarded. You can make your character that delusional enough to think that, but it's documented fact in Bleach canon that Kariya was the first Bount and was given the first Bount seal by Ran'Tao. It's part of why he can control and be immune to the powers of the other Bounts, including yours.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

I didn't say I was the first bounto TFE, I said that I was older than Kariya, who I seem to remember being older than any other bounto in the arc. It's perfectly plausible to say that there were a lot of bounto that were older than Ryojin and Kariya together, they were probably killed by 2ns squad though. I'll still change it I'm just pointing that out.

Also Hellya, I'll change the powers and since I'll probably be done by the time you look at this so hopefully third stage will be level enough for you.
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Change to say that your 1st form requires a lot of time and unbroken concentration to summon the clouds. Your doll can be engaged in combat, but if you get hit or break concentration, your efforts become all futile. Also, add some limits to the number of lightnings you can summon while you have the clouds.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

Blah, sorry bout that, I thought I'd done that already.

Anyway, edited and awaiting judgement
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Negro please.

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Sep 29 2008, 09:26 PM
I didn't say I was the first bounto TFE, I said that I was older than Kariya, who I seem to remember being older than any other bounto in the arc. It's perfectly plausible to say that there were a lot of bounto that were older than Ryojin and Kariya together, they were probably killed by 2ns squad though. I'll still change it I'm just pointing that out.


"Older"? How does that work? Kariya WAS the First Bount. :confuse2: Do you just mean older-looking?
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Take out the part about how 12th squad conducted experiment that made you strong. I see that as a potential excuse for power.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

Changed and awaiting response.

Also, can I buff up his second stage a wee bit (Give him added speed, and the ability to stand on air) since it's basically his bankai?
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First of all, it's unlikely you are going to achieve 2nd stage. Second of all, look at Koga. He didn't gain any new ability when his doll became an axe. In other words, no.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

Alright
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I have a choice for you. I'm going to make La Rosa a little bit more organized. This means that La Rosa will have race leaders. Overall command will be mine, but it's kind of like shinigami divisions. If you want, you can drop your protector captain for Bount leader spot. Your choice.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

Honestly, I thought this would be the bounto-leader but I'm growing more and more attached to my Protector captain, plus my bounto's abilities don't really strike me as 'leader' material, so I'll redo his rank so that he's a regular bounto.
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Well, I would allow more room for power if you chose the bount leader, but I'm just giving you the option. Don't be pressured to make a decision you will regret.
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You know, now that you mention it, it DOES look a lot worse on the outside...

nah, it's fine. As long as I can give my bounto an advocate position I'm happy.
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