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| [WiP] Tis Femina, by Sythe - Naruto | |
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| Knighttemplarparents | Jul 16 2010, 05:36 AM Post #11 |
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Academy Student
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Voted. So just how much is out of Absolute Shit? Because I just voted it a 5 for its sheer audacity and brain. Seriously, it's such a shame that a fic like that gets put into this section. Can somebody come and actually give it a real rev? Preferrably not some brat under 18 who feels like he needs to defend his manliness by staying inside certain boundaries and over-reacting to people who are trying to create something new. |
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| li.u | Jul 16 2010, 04:49 PM Post #12 |
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Jounin
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*Moved to the Depository for now @Knighttemplarparents: Novelty is good and all, but it's not hard to understand that people just don't dig fem!Naruto transformation out of nowhere. If you like it that much, maybe you should start and write a decent review. Cause right now I only see comments about Naruto losing his penis for no reason and that doesn't catch my interest at all. |
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| Knighttemplarparents | Jul 17 2010, 04:15 AM Post #13 |
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Academy Student
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Hah...man. You make me sound like such an ass...or maybe just a Femnaru enthusiast. But okay, lets see what we can make from this. First of all, I am no fan of Femnaru. I was caught off guard by this fic just like probably about 90 % of its reader and I have to admit I wanted to close the brower on first chapter and just forget about it...but for some reason, I kept reading (probably morbid curiosity) and to my surprise, it was really good. And I am not the only who had this reaction. A brief view through its reviews showed that many of its readers publicly proclaimed that they hate femnaru fics but this one they will read (and like), two of which are seasoned writers of ff net with stories above one thousand reviews ( Taliath and Bukkakenojutsu). I actually found this fic through BukkakenoJutsu's favorites...so surprise surprise (probably the second reason why I kept going on). Right about now, it's updated to chapter 3, totalling over fifty thousand words (in 3 chapters. Can you name 10 more Naruto fics with the same volume per chapter) and attracting over a hundred reviews each chapter (which is a feat not usually seen in femnaru section...or mainstream section for that matter. That is proof alone that it reaches out far more than its femnaru audience and to Naruto fandom mainstream audience.) As far as I know, two more websites also recommended it, one of which nominated it for best fic of the month (going against a few other above one thousand reviews fics), but I never followed the voting so don't ask me. In term of its quality, gender bender aside, it has far superior plot than the majority of Naruto fanfic and by the end of chapter 3 I can't remember how many times it has caught me off-guard with one of its plot twists and reveals. Its characterization shows a lot of thoughts and researches from the author (creating a clan type military system based on the historical Shinsengumi, and political system similar to England's War of the Roses era). At the end of chapter 3 is a character study (about 2 k or so I think). At first I thought the gender bender part was kinda unneeded (like others I suppose), but after this recent chapter, it seems like it serves more than that (I won't tell. That's one big-ass plot twist). The fic takes a closer look on the effect of this body change for Naruto (who still thinks he's male in his head and is looking for a way to take back his original body), taking on its psychological effect, physiological effects (briefly and if you don't read carefully you'll probably miss it), and the effect it has on other people aside from Naruto. At the end of chapter 2 is a note from the author (huge ass man, huge ass) which addressed the reason why he (I don't know. Sounds like a guy but you never know) didn't put the femnaru warning in the summary and that he wrote the first chapter to weed out the more 'reactionary' readers (hah) and I have to say he probably succeeded. According to the author, the gender bender is just the first part, and the fic is attempting to address sexuality and taboo issues and that he didn't want a bunch of juvenile fan boys and girls on his case for having the balls to actually do something different for once. I don't know what's wrong with him but this guy repeatedly encourages skittish readers to hit the back button and warns that it will get a lot more gory in the future (which I agree because I did have a barf moment in the latest chapter) The only problem it seems to have so far is the minor mistakes scattering over the fic (most of it is in chapter 1 though) to which the author excused that he wasn't a native speaker and that the amount he has to check each time is quite large so it's easy to miss some (I don't like this point though. The guy probably should start looking for a beta or a better beta if already has one). But disliking a fic on the ground of a few typos when it has so many other good points is just kinda dumb so for this I'm willing to overlook. At the end, whether you like it or not, you have to admit that it was written with far better quality and dedication than the norm of Naruto fandom (which lately seems to have degenerate into a pissing ground contest for a few fan boys worrying over the size of their manhood). Although I'm not exactly one hundred percent comfortable with some of its aspects, I have to give respect where it is due. The author is clearly trying to create something new here and whether he succeeds or not, he still has achieved far more than many writers I've read from. Not to mention, a look through the reviews it has gotten from this site seems to come from people who never even bothered to read past its gender bender tag, its summary, or its first chapter. Real mature guys. So just as preparation, I have to show that I know what I'm talking about or some brat will probably come by and start flinging names. Peace! |
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| Cantic | Jul 17 2010, 04:41 AM Post #14 |
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Genin
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That was quite the...beefy review. It would be nice if we could get reviews like this on some our other questionable fics. After readng, I did enjoy it. I don't like the way he characterized Naruto, mainly b/c of some of the decisions Naruto made in regards to not fucking with the past. Leans toward the "r u rere" Naruto than the Naruto with common sense. Outside of that, this story has potential. As mentioned in knighttemplarguy's review, the detail to clan politics makes for a good read an the word count is solid. The female aspect gives access to some psycological issues and plot development that wouldn't have been possible other wise, making for a more interesting character. He has some blatant foreshadowing which is kinda bleh but doesn't really damage the story. I find myself more interested in the world around Naruto than Naruto himself. The author made some characters that are really enjoyable to read so being interested in the story world around Naruto isn't a bad thing for this fic. 4/5 |
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| li.u | Jul 17 2010, 07:49 AM Post #15 |
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Jounin
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True enough. We all have our peeves that kill a story instantly for us. For me it's everything not Naruto-centric and I don't make any exceptions there either. In this case it's seemingly pointless fem!Naruto. Now, while it is the author's decision alone to weed out the more 'reactionary' readers, as you called it, no one can be expected to continue reading something they don't like nor understand without being given the prospect of improvement. So, I'll just say that it was a risky move on the author's part, but it seems to have paid off for him since he obviously has a following. Doesn't automatically make the quitters a bunch of immature brats, though. The only immature part about it is distorting the ratings with default 0/1 stars for yaoi, naruhina, narusaku, w/e. That's just lame, so the general rule is 'don't vote if you don't care'. Maybe I'll give this fic a try some time later, though I still have 0 interest in it. Just to see where people are coming from. Boredom usually is the right incentive for that. Edited by li.u, Jul 17 2010, 07:49 AM.
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| Orchamus | Aug 31 2010, 07:36 PM Post #16 |
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Genin
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Alright, lets see what I can come up with. I saw this when it first came out, and the first thing to pop into my mind was "Holy shit, did that actually just happen?" I mean, there are fics where Naruto becomes a girl, for various crappy or good reasons, and there are a few where he becomes a chakra like entity, though they are very few and far between in quality, and there are a ton of time travel fics. To see all of them combined into one and have it actually work...well, hot damn. I give it a 3.5/5. |
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